By and large, the importance of family members in successfulness is undenible. there are a plethora of people who are in the conviction that nowdays its much easier to become successful withouth the help of family members than in the past. While others take a radically different point of view. To the extend which my personal perspective is concerend I accord with the first group. Among countles reasons which give adherence to my opinion, I will delve into the most important ones in what follows.
Firstly, the rediculuous aristocracy of old times has been destroyed and been replaced by the laws of equlity. In the past the heretric structure of nobles didnt left any room for independent individuals,no matter how innovative, to flourish properly.the new government's structures not only
have dwindled those borders but also, have provided the majority of people with the equl opportunities such as educational ones. for instance my father was deprived from proper education untill he was 15 because there was no one to support him with the kind of money that was needed in those days to recieve proper education. it was only then that my uncle provided him the chance of becoming a doctor through his newly earned welth. if it wasnt for his brother my father never could have been a doctor. in the contrast my friend, that was from a poor family, easily went to the university and became a doctor since the free entrance exam of medicine provided by government,allowed him to take his chance.
secondly, the development of internet and new technologies hav provided a suitable bed for people to achive success. Gone are the days where a writer had to sophicate the divine talents he posessed in order to avoid the confilct that his writings could raise in his village. for example as my brother turned 18, he showed us the draft of his newly written story. My father asked him to stop writing sci-fi stories and to get involved in classic forms. everyone mocked him but it wasnt long after that a famous publisher, to whom he had sent his stories, agreed to publish his stories. He reached the fame and success which he only dreamed about in less than 6 months, without the help of any other being.
In short, all the aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that it's much easier now days to achive sucess without the help of family members.
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- 7. Young people should try different jobs before they decide which job or career they will choose in the long term. Do you agree or disagree? 76
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- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, then, while, for example, for instance, in short, kind of, such as, by and large
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1958.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 407.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81081081081 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68928992553 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.572481572482 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 619.2 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.0990223645 48.9658058833 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.777777778 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6111111111 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.38888888889 5.45110844103 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 5.5376344086 343% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.185434880133 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0608011914544 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0833007179637 0.0737576698707 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111463653378 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0709980165103 0.0645574589148 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.88 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.