Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The job has a greater effect on one’s overall happiness than social life does.
Happiness, as we all know, is a crucial part of human beings’ life that attract attention. Due to the paramount importance of happiness in ones’ life, efforts for elevating its effectiveness have always been among the top priorities of experts. In this regard, many believe that the effect of a job on happiness is more significant than social life. Contrary to common belief, I believe that a happy life has nothing to do with the job. Indeed, social circumstance has more effect than a job does. I will delve into two conspicuous reasons to elaborate on my standpoint.
The first reason that makes me hold the belief that social life has great importance is related to humans’ lifestyle. Undoubtedly, people are born to live in social communities; every interaction consider advantageous, and the job is one factor that provides individuals with such situations. In other words, even jobs are emanated from social interactions. If there were no good relationships among co-workers, they would not feel happiness at their job. In fact, social interactions play a vital role in people’s moods. Take my personal experience as an example. A couple of years ago, I fell loneliness, and I suffered from depression. While I did not have any friends, I did not look eager to start any relationship too. The situation at work far worsened. Nobody behaved in a proper way. I thought the colleagues are enemies and never do anything in favor of me. One day, a therapist advised me to make friends and show my affection to others, especially my co-workers. Surprisingly, that worsen circumstance did not take too long, and I confronted with people who show appropriate behavior. Thus, social interaction is among elements that are the first phase of every positive or negative mood people bear. What would happen if the buses provide employees with such friendly circumstances? Needless to say, they feel more pleasant at the workplace. This, as a general rule, is exited in all circumstances. The better social life people have, the more happiness they feel.
Another equally noteworthy reason to bear in mind is the effects of other factors like genes on happiness. Without a doubt, some inborn elements determine the feelings. For instance, in human beings, not only many traits but also many emotions define by genes. Although DNA does the definition of these feelings, their empowerment depends on the environment. The feeling of happiness is no exception. The environment, the feelings it conveys, all in all, are factors that weaken or empower the happiness feeling. If the circumstance positively perceived, the positive emotions would arise and vice versa. Scientifically speaking, when people are among the other individuals who receive positive energy from, they feel happier. Therefore hypothetically, people who spend more time among their friends obviously feel better toward life because they expose themselves to a social interaction that is favorable for them.
To summarize contemplating all remarks, we can safely conclude that every feeling depends on genes and then the situation a person endures. Some abilities acquire to empower them. So, social life can be effective as an important element in happiness.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Therefore,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, so, then, therefore, thus, while, for instance, in fact, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 8.0752688172 248% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2722.0 1977.66487455 138% => OK
No of words: 521.0 407.700716846 128% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2245681382 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77759609229 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96304432459 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 290.0 212.727598566 136% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.556621880998 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 861.3 618.680645161 139% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 10.0 3.08781362007 324% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 36.0 20.6003584229 175% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.8890039322 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.6111111111 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.4722222222 20.6045352989 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.75 5.45110844103 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233878690463 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0555458975966 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.070370650902 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152018427228 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.103444278948 0.0645574589148 160% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 48.81 58.1214874552 84% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.4 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 138.0 86.8835125448 159% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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