Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Most advertisements make products seem much better than they really are. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, advertising is one of the most principal ways to introduce products. Advertisement is what factories’ owner use to improve their rate of sell in competing business field. Some people believe that advertising doesn't represent the reality of products, whereas others hold an opposite opinion. In my view, noticeable amount of overstate is used in advertisement for two remarkable reasons.
The main reason is that advertisements deceive people about the real quality of products to increase the revenue of producers. In recent years, there is a great deal of competition in business field because of growing number of factories, therefore advertisers utilize any strategies convincing people to buy their products. For example, statistics demonstrated the positive effect of exaggeration in presenting products on financial efficiency of companies. Researchers investigated two groups of factories, one which use various methods to show their materials better and another advertise the real quality of their products. Surprisingly, the selling rate of the company which mislead people is 10 times higher than another one. Advertisements cause low quality factories to be the victorious of market competition. If companies had not use advertisements to show better quality of their products, they wouldn't gain such great incomes.
Also, advertisements use psychology methods to present products better than their real quality. People have vast choice in purchasing due to the diversity of products, thus any means to increase the chance of selecting a particular product could be beneficial. Majority of people don't aware of the strong impact of psychology tricks in leading individuals toward opting particular products. For instance, as I studied psychology, I should do a research in different strategies to encourage customers. After watching many advertisements and visiting bunch of markets, I noticed significant attendance of famous actors and athletes in advertisements in order to persuading people about the fake quality of their materials. Moreover, they take advantages of appealing graphical features to attract more customers, although the quality of their products weren't as good as they were advertised. This experience taught me that people shouldn't always trust advertisements they saw all around them.
In conclusion, advertisements don't be always honest about the quality of products. Not only would they increase the financial efficiency of factories, but also benefit psychological methods to mislead people. I think people should pay more attention to distinguish the real quality of materials.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, whereas, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2257.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 392.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.75765306122 4.8611393121 118% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44960558625 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.20859554651 2.67179642975 120% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.561224489796 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 700.2 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.798067114 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.476190476 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6666666667 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.52380952381 5.45110844103 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.150524964011 0.236089414692 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0521422485999 0.076458572812 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0394428239503 0.0737576698707 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0963549107729 0.150856017488 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0360994929689 0.0645574589148 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.28 58.1214874552 62% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.13 10.9000537634 148% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.08 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 86.8835125448 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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