Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Most advertisements make products seem much better then they really are.
Even though maney companys and some of the people argue as if it is a general truth that advertisements are more benefits and they show real products, I firmly recommend that asvertisements is a way for sail more products they have never released the origin of products. advertisements amke a perfect condition to take more money and apealing the more customs. And believe it or not, when a companey play a real product that is not perfect, it will not have a good results. I will elaborate my idea with some significant reasons in the following paragraphs.
One of the meaningfull reasons coming to my mind at first is that some factories dont have a important prodacts and they want to earn much money, so they start to advertis and display thier products better than they actually are. In my personality experience as an example, i have bought a pairs of shoos on the internet that constantly seem to have a great quility and texture, not only i have never use this shoos a short time but also i spend much money for that. As you can this company take more benefits by using advertisements to sial its worse products.
Another my remarkable reason is that to showing materials more and more makes people encourage and promote to buy them, nevertheless, they really are not as displying. As an example, todays, we are witness several food substantials thay shown in TV, Streats, Newspapers and somthings like that. As a matter of fact, these foods are unhealthy via adding more protected matterials and colorfulld substantials to attracts more children.
As a result, based on the above reasons, producta which show by asvertisement are not trully that we see. to take much money and attract more customers.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Even though maney companys and some of t...
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Even though maney companys and some of the people argue as if it is a general trut...
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Suggestion: Advertisements
... never released the origin of products. advertisements amke a perfect condition to take more m...
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...my mind at first is that some factories dont have a important prodacts and they want...
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...experience as an example, i have bought a pairs of shoos on the internet that constantl...
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...lity and texture, not only i have never use this shoos a short time but also i spen...
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...er use this shoos a short time but also i spend much money for that. As you can t...
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...e but also i spend much money for that. As you can this company take more benefits...
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...ubstantials to attracts more children. As a result, based on the above reasons, p...
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...vertisement are not trully that we see. to take much money and attract more custom...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, nevertheless, really, so, as a matter of fact, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 52.1666666667 50% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1428.0 1977.66487455 72% => OK
No of words: 295.0 407.700716846 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8406779661 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82095413761 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.579661016949 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 449.1 618.680645161 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.9317127128 48.9658058833 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.0 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5833333333 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 5.45110844103 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162166191915 0.236089414692 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.054330181447 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0452823302052 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0852013013297 0.150856017488 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0494633420676 0.0645574589148 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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