Do you agree or disagree with the following statement. Movies and televisionhave more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement. Movies and television
have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.

Throughout history, human beings’ lives have changed enormously since they inherently have a tendency to improve their lives. Television programs would be an essential factor having remarkable effects on people's lives. Although some people believe that television and movies bring people more benefits, others hold exactly an opposite perspective. In no way could I agree with the latter viewpoint. There are some reasons, the most outstanding of which will be discussed in the ensuing paragraphs.
To begin with, it is undoubted that so influential have valuable information been that they have helped people to increase their knowledge in a wide variety of fields. To illustrate this fact, one needs only refer to the numerous documentaries transmitting a great deal of information about human beings, history, animals, and so forth. An example will illustrate this fact much better. there was a time that I was sick and I had to stay at home and watched television programs. Since my weight was high, my friends had suggested me that there is a channel which they train an efficient way to decrease your weight in a normal state, and after watching that program I could decrease my weight in an ideal form. Not until this incident occurred did I realize the importance of TV programs, for I do believe that had I not watched that program, I would not have found a way to decrees my weight.
Furthermore, some people believe that television and movies take people's time and they are not a good entertainment for them, others are convinced that they can be a great entertainment, and also, people are able to release their stresses and tensions after stressful and boring day of school or job, because, (3) television show the programs which are suitable for each age. Hence, I do agree with the latter point, for I do believe that the more people watch the television, the better they can spend their time without spending a lot of money. By way of illustration, the noteworthy intelligible results, which conducted in our country, show that watching television programs is the most affordable type entertainments among wide variety type of entertainments.
To make a long story short, by considering all the aforementioned reasons and many others, no one can deny the enormous positive effects of a television program on people's lives in every age. Not only are they able to increase their knowledge by watching various programs, but also they (4) can save a lot of a great deal of money (5). For this reason, I highly recommend that family member allocate some time to watch TV program because it provides an opportunity for them to make their relationship strengthen.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 387, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: There
... will illustrate this fact much better. there was a time that I was sick and I had to...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, so, then, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2236.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 447.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00223713647 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59808378696 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.864041482 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501118568233 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 693.0 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 74.8787254793 48.9658058833 153% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.529411765 100.406767564 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2941176471 20.6045352989 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.17647058824 5.45110844103 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.131723266657 0.236089414692 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0483866109645 0.076458572812 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0535648237452 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0883040189302 0.150856017488 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0411424298234 0.0645574589148 64% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 11.7677419355 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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