There is no doubt that nowadays, technology facilities are increasing in a high rate, and no one could deny this fact. A vast majority of people are of the opinion that these days, people can more benefit from the media such as TV, especially those youngesters watching movies mosyt of the time. I, contrary to popular belief contend that it has much more negative effects on Juveniles than positive ones. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into the most conspicuous reasons and examples to explicate my vantage point.
One of the reasons coming to my mind at first is that nowadays people are more exposed to anxiety due to the lack of time caused by watching TV. It may comes a suprise that an accumulation of evidence suggest that depression is on the rise because people have less time to dedicate to their improvement to achieving their goals as a result of addictive programs and movies shown on TV. To shed light on this issue, take my brother as an example, he was a movie fan and he allocated most of his sparse time to watching movies. As a result, he did not enough time to study for his Final exams on the last week of her master's degree. Furthermore, he dropped all of his courses in that term, and be quited by the university. After months, his friends make progress and apply for a Phd podition in decent universities. He now have more susceptible and sensitive characteristic and are dissapointed. This example clearly illustrate that people nowadays are suffering from mental disease as a result of watching stifle programs on TV.
Another equally noteworthy point in corroborating my stance on this subject is that, there are harmful movie genre which is the most popular ones such as science fiction and action genre that spred crime and anxiety among the juvenils. In essence, thanks to state-of-the-art technology nowadays, people are more inclined to watch the movies which are acclaimed by the expertise in the field of movies. A study was conducted by a group of researchers at Oxford University on the source of recent surveys. Its results indicated that the rate of movie production in the field of action genre is increased at a rate of 50 percent and 80 percent of the awards which is given by a committe to movie scenarios, is in favor to action movies.
To wrap it up, all aforementioned reasons and examples lead us to conclusion that nowadays, TV programs disadvantages overweight its advantages. Not only can these programs make young people to feel sad and depression, but also they spread the anxious among these ages. However, that was a story in a nutshell. Actually, there are other reasons and examples elaborating on this idea which are not mentioned due to the shortage of time. Finally, it is widely suggested that the government should constrain the time of watching TV and movies by establishing new rules.
- TPO-47 - Integrated Writing Task 73
- It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life. 80
- Imagine you are an undergraduate student, for your final semester what would you prefer?1. Conducting an intensive research and writing a paper on the topic.2. Internship 90
- Imagine that you are in a classroom or a meeting. The teacher or the meeting leader says something incorrect In your opinion, which of the following is the best thing to do?•Interrupt and correct the mistake right away.•Wait until the class or meeting 76
- TPO 54 Integrated Writing Task 3
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 822, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'He' must be used with a third-person verb: 'has'.
Suggestion: has
...podition in decent universities. He now have more susceptible and sensitive characte...
^^^^
Line 5, column 110, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'genres'?
Suggestion: genres
...ubject is that, there are harmful movie genre which is the most popular ones such as ...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, no doubt, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 75.0 52.1666666667 144% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2374.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 493.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8154158215 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71206996034 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7746610378 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 252.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511156186613 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 760.5 618.680645161 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.9308819321 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.047619048 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4761904762 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.85714285714 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15354999325 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0450280624301 0.076458572812 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0452511784049 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0991082129719 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0487834661322 0.0645574589148 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 86.8835125448 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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