television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave
Nowadays, it is commonly accepted that television is so far from its primary propose as a source of fine socialization and transmitting genius and helpful meanings. Contrary to this popular belief, there are still those who argue that people have not be so critics about television programs since television provides people with the most enjoyable and accessible amusement, and just few programs should not change people view toward this helpful technology. However, I, to a great extent, agree with this idea that movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.
First and foremost, television programs obviously encourage violence behaviors in the society. Not only movies with more young and teenage audience have a lot of extreme criminal and violence content, but also some of programs for very young children sharing harsh and unethical information. Unfortunately, the visual effects of movies make repeating these types of behaviors interesting for young people, for example, it is not unusual that the teenagers steal something from a store to show their courage to their friends. Some young people think that if they do not drink beverage or do not smoke so they are not enough cool or adult. Moreover, sometimes television shares some negative information and attitude toward one particular race or religion beliefs, which it has a very harmful and dangerous consequence for the society.
Another significant fact that should be taken into consideration is that television become a powerful tool in hand of some people for commercial aims. The advertisement companies employ celebrities and models to advertising their products which force people to buy some products that they do not really needed. In addition, the television programs determine some standards for human beauty and body shape, young people hardly try to lose weight and seek to become similar to the famous actors and models. Nonetheless, this condition raises the threat of some mental illness such as depression and anxiety for someone who are not very slim or tall, since everybody needed to find themselves beautiful and attractive.
On the basis of the reasons that were mentioned above, I am convinced that movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. It is because television share harmful information and encourage violence behavior, and because television is now more a tool for advertisement.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Television
television have more negative effects than positiv...
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Line 2, column 252, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'been'.
Suggestion: been
...ll those who argue that people have not be so critics about television programs si...
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Line 4, column 211, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'some of', you should use 'the' ('some of the programs') or simply say ''some programs''.
Suggestion: some of the programs; some programs
...criminal and violence content, but also some of programs for very young children sharing harsh a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, moreover, nonetheless, really, so, still, for example, in addition, such as, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 13.8261648746 181% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2190.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 408.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.36764705882 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74932709953 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522058823529 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 702.9 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 51.7614721584 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 156.428571429 100.406767564 156% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.1428571429 20.6045352989 141% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.92857142857 5.45110844103 164% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.354486204264 0.236089414692 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.141494759231 0.076458572812 185% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.158276216225 0.0737576698707 215% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.276461548473 0.150856017488 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.153384895773 0.0645574589148 238% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.4 11.7677419355 156% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.58 58.1214874552 58% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 10.1575268817 156% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.46 10.9000537634 133% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 10.002688172 200% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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