Nowadays, it is commonly accepted that because of fasting rate of living in the modern lifestyle. Most of the people are busy with a huge number of tasks for evaluation in their job. And in a whole view, it seems to become a serious problem for our society that can be mentioned as strong threaten for future of the society. this condition also has a bad effect on quality of works and life. Contrary to this popular beliefs there are still those who argue that this negative view about today's people is a mistake and through a real view people now have the better live condition than it was in the past so it is shown that this new lifestyle gives to people the chance for a comfortable life. I, to a great extent, agree with this idea that people who are very busy with many different things, they have lower quality and efficiency in their task and life.
First and foremost, humans mind have the special and limited capacity. Thus, it is true that people can organize a lot of works through a correct planning. But, some of them try to handling task and programs that it is out of our ability. Today, people because of huge competition between coworkers try to do many tasks parallel and at the same time. To showing to their boss they are qualified people for receiving to the higher level and position. For example, I have the friend she works in the national institute of genetic engineering and she worked for 8 hours in each day and after that, she goes to some extra classes to improve her ability on some new experimental methods. But, it is led to she make a big mistake in her job that led to wasting a lot of money and she lost the confidence of her supervisor. This situation presents her in the threaten of depression.
On another significant fact, that should be taken into the consideration is that when people try to do a lot of different things together. it is led to damage to their health and also their personal relationship with their family and also their friends. because we see that today parents have not enough time to spend it with their children. Surely, caring for children is the best important task of each parent. and it is led to strong harm to families and also to society.
On the basis of reasons that mentioned above I am convinced that doing a lot of things together, it is led to they do fewer things well. because of increasing the possibility of mistake and low accuracy and also, serious mental and social damage to people.
- one of the best ways that parents can help their children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job. 70
- TPO 45- In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives 73
- Most advertisements make products seem much better than they really are. 90
- TPO 50 3
- TPO 47 80
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, still, thus, well, for example, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2006.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 444.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.51801801802 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5903493882 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39533064268 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513513513514 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 641.7 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.2516616031 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.5238095238 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1428571429 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.2380952381 5.45110844103 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.5376344086 253% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.185435985249 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0490000870833 0.076458572812 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0703682485318 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115336834121 0.150856017488 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0548161518722 0.0645574589148 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.94 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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