Do you agree or disagree with the following statement One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part time job

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.

It is critically important that people step into their adult life with some previous experience. Personally, I believe having a part-time occupation is a becoming way for teenagers to be prepared for the next level of their lives, and parents should be the advocate of this idea. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explain in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, teenagers will be familiar with various careers, which will help them to choose their future jobs. By working in different part-time jobs, they will gain some perspective on many businesses, and can determine which career path attracts them the most. A successful adult life depends on many factors, one of which is having a vocation that is interesting for the person. Therefore, parents could motivate their young children to try some half-time jobs to find their passion. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. When I was in high school, following my father’s suggestion, I got to work in a call center at weekends for few months. During my working hours, I noticed that human resources management had an appealing job definition, because it had to deal with people, trying to help them to fulfill their jobs more efficiently. Had my father not encouraged me to work at that call center, I would have not decided to follow my education in management and human resources now.
Furthermore, parents will make their children more responsible adults by recommending them to have a temporary job as teenagers, which is a valuable asset for a person. Most teenagers feel that they are just obligated to do their school assignments, so they do not require accepting any other duties. If they have a task out of the house, they will learn how to deal with the consequences of their actions. This is because someone other than their parents will ask them about the task. As a result, this would lead them to grow their personality and be more responsible as adults. For instance, my younger brother never made his bed before leaving for school, but after he got a part-time job in a hotel as a housekeeper for few months, he started to neat his room eventually at home. Therefore, subconsciously, a job shapes the behaviors of teenagers.
In conclusion, I am of the view that encouraging young people to have a temporary job by their parents makes them well prepared for their adult life. This is because they will be able to find their desired future career and more responsible in the upcoming days of life.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 713, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'resources'' or 'resource's'?
Suggestion: resources'; resource's
... my working hours, I noticed that human resources management had an appealing job definit...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, if, so, therefore, well, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2075.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 430.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82558139535 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77436012336 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504651162791 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 639.0 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.6392359672 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.75 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.3 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.35538940331 0.236089414692 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108404038909 0.076458572812 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0652286201859 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.239402302738 0.150856017488 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0172407537764 0.0645574589148 27% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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