Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents today are more involved in their children’s education than were parents in the past.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Education is considered one of the most important aspects in students lives. Well educated children can adapt the new dynamic world and they can deal with both advanced and modern technologies. I am sure that some people believe that parents should get involved in their children's education process would be a great idea, while others would disagree. However, when it comes to me I totally agree that parents should join their children when they have to take any educational decision. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.

To begin with, children can benefit from their parents past experience. Our parents passed through a lot of issues and they knew how to solve these problems. So, children can take their parents footprints. For instance, my brother gardauated from high school five years ago and he was so confused about which major he should join. In fact, my father was so knowledgable and he adviced him to join the medical school accroding to his interests. Furthermore, my dad encourage him to start search online about the cources that he will take at the first semester. Consequently, my brother got motivated to join medical collegee because my dad gave him a clear picture about the medical subjects. As a result, my brother did a great success at his first assignment and he gradauated with high scores at the first year. However, if my brother did listen to his father's advice, he could not be a professional doctor at the future. As you can see, children can ask their parents for advice before starting and educational level in order to enjoy their careers after their graduation.

In addition, children are not mature enough and sometimes they waste their time. Nowadays, many children spend their time watching television and playing games with other friends. For example, my daughter is ten years old ans she is in elementary school. Last summer, she had assignment about plants and she had to submit it to her teacher by the end of the week. In fact, my daughter was so carless and she spent all her time playing with our neighbors at the pack yard. So, it ended up that she got bad score and her teacher asked to repeat the whole assignment all over again. Consequently, my daughter became mad and felt they she in trouble. So, she came to me asking for advice. Besides, I encouraged her to go to the library and borrow book to help her finish her paperwork. In addition, I supported her with tremendous printed materials. So, she would able to impress her teacher with her incredible and professional work. This experience taught me that children do not have enough skills to mange their time and parents should lend them a hand to submit their paperwork on time.

In conclusion, I strongly agree that parents today are more involved in their children's education plan. This is because parents have plenty of knowledge in different careers that can benefit their children, and because parents support their children to manage their time on the right track.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 56, Rule ID: PAST_EXPERIENCE_MEMORY[1]
Message: Use simply 'experience'.
Suggestion: experience
...children can benefit from their parents past experience. Our parents passed through a lot of is...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, so, well, while, for example, for instance, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, as a result, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 88.0 43.0788530466 204% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2511.0 1977.66487455 127% => OK
No of words: 519.0 407.700716846 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83815028902 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7730044521 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54600929734 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 263.0 212.727598566 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.506743737958 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 752.4 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 21.0 9.59856630824 219% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.6133502157 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.5862068966 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8965517241 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.89655172414 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230576008465 0.236089414692 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0708615104768 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0883441918783 0.0737576698707 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180689241538 0.150856017488 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.093315765364 0.0645574589148 145% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.46 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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