Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Recently, there has been a ton of debate on whether children received too much assistance for make decisions from their parents in the past. Personally, I am of the opinion that children nowadays are prone to make decisions by themselves. I feel this way because of two reasons, which I will explore in this essay.
First of all, parents as one of the most significant source of information for children to know the society has declined. Parents used to be a major
place where their children can acquire knowledge, while with the development of modern technology, children can easily and quickly search unknown information through internet. For example, before the internet if a student needed to decide which university to apply for after graduating from high school, he had to go to his parents for help because they could obtain much more information via their social circles. On the other hand, the student can simply go to the website of each university where they can find even more details that can assist them to make an appropriate decision. Thus, there is no need for him to depend on his parents anymore.
Secondly, young people are more likely to turn to friends for help nowadays. Obviously, children at the similar age have more common interests, thus they have the tendency to hang out together. However, in the past because of the limited methods for communication, mainly letters, they did not get enough chance to exchange ideas, while currently children can easily get in touch with each other through messages, phone calls and video chats. Eventually, they spend more time with friends than ever before, which encourages them to make decision without replying on their parents. This is best demonstrated by a study conducted by Peking University, results from which show that time that children spent with their friends in the past is 50% or even less than current children do.
In conclusion, I am fully convinced that young children in the past depend too much on their parents for decision making. This is because they have more source to find information and because they are prone to seek help from their peers nowadays.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, second, secondly, so, thus, while, for example, i feel, in conclusion, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1795.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 362.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95856353591 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36191444098 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55258334942 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.530386740331 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 546.3 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.1638871716 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.666666667 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1333333333 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.13333333333 5.45110844103 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247408974146 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0979898251201 0.076458572812 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0853280025923 0.0737576698707 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15176545788 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0507479003598 0.0645574589148 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 70, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...n of debate on whether children received too much assistance for make decisions f...
^^
Line 3, column 149, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...has declined. Parents used to be a major place where their children can acquire k...
^^^^
Line 4, column 653, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...r him to depend on his parents anymore. Secondly, young people are more likely t...
^^^^^^
Line 6, column 782, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... or even less than current children do. In conclusion, I am fully convinced that...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, second, secondly, so, thus, while, for example, i feel, in conclusion, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1795.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 362.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95856353591 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36191444098 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55258334942 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.530386740331 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 546.3 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.1638871716 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.666666667 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1333333333 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.13333333333 5.45110844103 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247408974146 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0979898251201 0.076458572812 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0853280025923 0.0737576698707 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15176545788 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0507479003598 0.0645574589148 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.