Making decisions has always been hard when it comes to inexperienced young adults. Some people regard young adults, in the past, as dependent individuals. This group also believes that young adults subjected too much to their parents to make decisions for them. And believe young adults, nowadays, can make better decisions about their own lives. Others do not have the same viewpoint. I subscribe to the former. In my opinion young adults, in this day and age, are more capable of making their own decisions in life. The reasons for which I believe so are as follows:
In this day and age, young people are becoming more exposed to decision making. There is no doubt that the world is becoming more complicated each passing day. Technology's development is undeniably astounding. And this has a major impact on the growth of a young adult's mind. For example, a teenager wants to buy a new smartphone. There are many smartphones with different features on the market. Thus the teenager has to decide which phone he or she wants. Even though this might not seem like an important decision but the outcome is still important. He or she could decide on a smartphone, with no knowledge on the technical matter, but in the end, he or she will see the result of their choice. Therefore, understand how to decide on which product to buy.
In the present time, parents are more educated and have a better understanding of their children's needs. Not to mention how parents, nowadays, have more resources, like books and experts, to help them raise their children better. In the past, parents did not have these benefits and only had limited knowledge of the subject. Thus, most parents did not allow their children to make decisions. Parents only believed that children's observation of the parent's decisionmaking would be enough. Hence, young adults always asked their parents to decide for them. In contrast, parents nowadays let their teenagers decide what they should do and only provide them with their own opinions and experiences. Letting teenagers make the ultimate decision and allowing them to see the consequences of their actions. Thus, helping them gain experience and knowledge that will help them in their own lives.
In today's modern world, young adults can make better decisions in comparison to young adults in the past. Advances in technology and parent's improved parenting skills are proving to be helpful to young adults to make better decisions.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 398, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
... with different features on the market. Thus the teenager has to decide which phone ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, so, still, therefore, thus, as to, for example, in contrast, no doubt, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2055.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 411.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50256981431 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59404597835 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.486618004866 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 621.0 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.0471355897 48.9658058833 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.3928571429 100.406767564 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.6785714286 20.6045352989 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.78571428571 5.45110844103 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.88709677419 246% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.437701543946 0.236089414692 185% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115720386076 0.076458572812 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0991536151985 0.0737576698707 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.276378129736 0.150856017488 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.118587487649 0.0645574589148 184% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.13 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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