Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
I agree that nowadays young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives. Parents today can not help their kids to take right decisions suitable for nowadays fast pace life. That is because, parents only know the outdated traditional ways of life. Also, it is easy for the new generations to access many sources of information to help them take decisions about their future.
First, most parents advice their kids to choose the regular life style which is going to college then work and marry in the same city where the family live. other parents want their teens to go to the same college as the parents did and work in the same field. Parents in most cases do not push their kids to explore life. on the other hand, nowadays teens want to travel and live on their own and study new carrier fields like computer engineering, information security analysis and many more things that the parents generations do not know about. So, the old generation can not be a good supporter for their youngsters to make brave decisions regarding to their future.
Secondly, because of the communication revolution that we have world wide, so young people can find great sources of information to help them make their own decisions. Also, they can take advantage not only from their parents experience but also, they can access to many people experience through the internet. When I was about to go to college my parents wanted me to study pharmacy school to earn good money but i made my own search on the many available websites and I concluded that the pharmaceutical career does not have a promising future so i chose post secondary teaching carrier which is rising in the job market recently. So, thanks for the information revolution on the internet which make it easy for young people to take their decisions in life.
Finally, I do not think that parents old tradition way of thinking will help their the new generations to take life decisions more than internet information and communication do for them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, in most cases, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1676.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 349.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80229226361 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32221490584 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51311777566 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 212.727598566 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.461318051576 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 528.3 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.4324702519 48.9658058833 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.714285714 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9285714286 20.6045352989 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.28571428571 5.45110844103 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.349377231146 0.236089414692 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.153598385935 0.076458572812 201% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.116404940982 0.0737576698707 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.236846258063 0.150856017488 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0772798318084 0.0645574589148 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.32 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 86.8835125448 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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