Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People should have hobbies and do physical activities that are very different from their own work.
Modern people are tied up in a fast-paced life and feel overwhelmed. The white-collar class, in particular, has been deprived of time with hobbies due to tight schedules. Unfortunately, working under adverse circumstances, some people even devote their leisure time to hobbies as same as their own work in the name of professional improvement. From my perspective, pursuing hobbies and dealing with daily work should be rigidly divided instead of being inextricably mixed, which might be conducive to the quality of life.
For starters, most members of the working class have been facing potential health risks due to overwork. Major media have been advocating that picking up various hobbies and participating in diverse physical activities can address work-related stress, which may suggest that the prevalence of subhealth has drawn attention from the public. An investigation conducted by the New York Times has brought out that over seventy percent white-collar workers spend their spare time raising pets and engaging in team sports, which can mitigate the risk of mental illness. In contrast, the other thirty percent, those workaholics who are drowning in work during break time tend to isolate themselves from multiple forms of entertainment and suffer from depression more frequently. Evidence indicate that immersing oneself in various hobbies can help people recover from boredom and fatigue. Therefore, as long as people keep various hobbies consistently, they will enjoy sound health surely in the long run.
Furthermore, engaging in hobbies and physical activities which are extremely different from their work is beneficial to people’s social network as well. People living in the current days mainly have regular and canned routines, which means that they can merely contact with the same group of people everyday, such as their colleagues and families. Nevertheless, if they spend their leisure time taking part in some team sports like football or basketball, they may acquire more opportunities to make new friends, which can not only enlarge their social network but also broaden their horizons. By contrast, if their spare time are fully occupied by heavy work, they may be stuck in the boring and canned schedules, thus their lives will be all the same without novelty. Hence, it is crucial for people to allocate some time to their hobbies and physical activities without considering about the work.
Overall, in order to relieve the heavy pressure from bustling daily work and expand their social network, people can, and in many cases should, pick up a range of hobbies and physical exercises which are unrelated to their own work.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 305, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...y contact with the same group of people everyday, such as their colleagues and families....
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, if, may, nevertheless, so, therefore, thus, well, in contrast, in particular, such as, all the same, in many cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2257.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 421.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.36104513064 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73681211323 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.558194774347 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 681.3 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 53.5974579621 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.0625 100.406767564 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.3125 20.6045352989 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0625 5.45110844103 166% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.293123019928 0.236089414692 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111142131309 0.076458572812 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0713889873999 0.0737576698707 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.205110498083 0.150856017488 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0271677752541 0.0645574589148 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 11.7677419355 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 10.9000537634 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.13 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 86.8835125448 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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