Personal enjoyment is necessary to survive a salubrious life. It helps to keep the focus on work and needs for refreshment. But today people spent too much time on this which is not good habits. So, I agree with the statement for two reasons.
The main reason is that personal enjoyment-doing things make people less work-oriented. People spent too much time on these things that they should not. In addition, they are also spending minimal time with family and friends. But they should do it instead of spending time on personal entertainment. For instance, one of my college friends used to spend too much time on his personal interest. He always misses the classes and assignments. Eventually, he failed in the second semester of college and never able to pass this semester. Now, he is working on a street shop to live. I have also other friends who are also spending more time on personal pleasure and doing some miserable things which should not do. So, we can say people are now more interest in personal enjoyment than the necessary doing things.
Another reason is that today most of the people of our country are more likely to interest in bribery. Personal pleasure-doing things are costly and people want to do these more curiously. To do these things, one should have more money. That's why people are likely to involve in bribery to fulfill their requirements. For example, as I said most of the people of our country are involved in such miserable things to earn huge amount of money in a short time to do personal enjoyment things. Most of the political person, office personnel are alleged for involving in bribery. These statistics show us the inclination of doing personal things than the required things.
In sum, some may thing people today less spent time on personal activities than they should do, but more bribery, doing less work, spending less time with family, frequent breaking relationship these things told us different things. People are more willing to the most they interested. But I think people should not do this.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 238, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: That's
...ese things, one should have more money. Thats why people are likely to involve in bri...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, second, so, for example, for instance, i think, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1711.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 350.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88857142857 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59283313645 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 212.727598566 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.465714285714 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 523.8 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.5768708403 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 71.2916666667 100.406767564 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.5833333333 20.6045352989 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.29166666667 5.45110844103 60% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.50944514646 0.236089414692 216% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.158105809068 0.076458572812 207% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.121572071517 0.0737576698707 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.325208686737 0.150856017488 216% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.118361175675 0.0645574589148 183% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.49 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.9 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 86.8835125448 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 10.002688172 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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