Computer games are now so prevalent and can not be ignored. Specially when dealing with children, computer games nowadays cover a huge part of their entertainment. Although some people think that computer games can be good for children's entertainment, I think that they are a threat to a healthy life for two main reasons.
First, computer games are designed in a way to be addictive, so children spend a lot time playing games and they can't be separated from them. Addiction is bad in any level for a healthy life, because it can cause some abnormal behavior, mostly when separated from the tools of addiction. For example, my brother was addicted to a computer game named Minecraft, he spent a lot of time building houses and farms and mining minerals in the game that he forgot to do his homeworks most of the time, which resulted in him getting bad grades. After seeing his low grades, my parents decided to ban him from playing computer games for a while, but he became short-tempered and he was always bored and tired. So as you can see, computer games can be addictive and this can affect childrens life in a bad way.
Second, playing computer games for a long time weakens eyesight. Since ability to see well is a crucial part of a healthy life, we must be careful how much time children are spending playing computer games. For example, I myself had a habit of playing Super mario every day. After about a year, my mother took me to the doctor for a check-up and he said that I had to wear eyeglasses. Although I hated eyeglasses, I had to wear them anyway. So playing computer games can be harmful to children because it can weaken their eyesight.
In conclusion, computer games can be a threat to childrens healthy life. Because not only do they addict children to play for long hours, but also they weaken children's eyesight. There are some other side-effects too, like childhood obesity, short-temperedness, loneliness and etc, So everyone must control how much time their children spend playing Computer games.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 114, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...spend a lot time playing games and they cant be separated from them. Addiction is ba...
^^^^
Line 3, column 788, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a bad way" with adverb for "bad"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...tive and this can affect childrens life in a bad way. Second, playing computer games for ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, anyway, but, first, if, second, so, well, while, for example, i think, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1683.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 353.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76770538244 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68026696869 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.498583569405 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 515.7 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.665536016 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.0 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7647058824 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.29411764706 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.267061040543 0.236089414692 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111982618523 0.076458572812 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0644830868813 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.192124451901 0.150856017488 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0226233307203 0.0645574589148 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.49 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.