Due to the reasons I have in mind I believe that taking risks is one of the most extraordinary skills that successful people have. Although to some states I also disagree with the statement but innovating, finding the best in our selves and exploring things that no-one has ever been able to are the superior reasons why I don't refute the claim.
To start with, inventing new things or testing new theories although a slight chance, worth spending time. A case in point, we can talk about Mark Zeckinburg, the founder of the Facebook. He made this social network when people didn't even thinking about such things and weren't obsesed with them as much as we are contemporarely. He took the risk and worked on his project perservingly and tested his hyphotesis. And now he is one of the 5 richest people in the world along with the inventor of the Amazoon website, Jeff bezos.
Secondly, I hold this believe that Finding our best self and keep knowing and improving ourselves to become the best is the sole perpose of our existance. What will we become if we just keep doing the same thing every day? Even if we are successful life is meaningless without change. Our world is constantly changing and we need to cope up with the frustraitingly increasing speed of developments in technology. Depite some people that claim routine is the default definition of happiness and success, I strongly disagree and think that opportunities, new understandings along with experiences we aggregate is imposible to achive without taking chances.
At last, Taking risks not always end up in success but they always worth making efferts. It is a known and vivid fact that we should be inspired with the people from the past and try to learn from history. A history in which we see that Henry Bequerel, the inventor of the redioactive elemetns, just got to this knowledge by accident and it happened only because it was raining and he couldn't repeat his routine of working under sun. Furthermore, The famouse Christophe Clomobe would never find america if he wouldn't have the enough courage and motivation to continue his rough trip despite all consequences he struggled with.
Consequently, we can find innovations, changs and evolutions if the human kind wasn't willing to take risks. Not all of the people who are prosperous in life are the best ones in their jobs. They sometimes are just some ordinary fellows like us who are brave enough to take steps in a ways that no one ever has. Therefore, the advantage of taking risks overwights being scared of making an attempt.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2120.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 441.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80725623583 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58257569496 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6934824145 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.566893424036 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 655.2 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.126864475 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.0 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.05 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.4 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217011481589 0.236089414692 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0583330901838 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0395909043627 0.0737576698707 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110480811483 0.150856017488 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0247028715706 0.0645574589148 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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