As the human are burn, they know nothing, even they do not know how to speak and make their needs. After they growing, they will start learning new things from their environment. for example; they know how they can prepare the things that they need, how to feed, how to speak, walk and so on. Personally I believe that the most successful people are the most risk acceptance people. I feel this way for two reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, Trying to do new things means try to experiment new things, this scenario will make people more strong and make them good experiences. It will enable the persons to live different. Living different from other people demands a strong courage. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. When I wanted to choose a topic for my monograph, searched for the most difficult problem that made the people crazy and no one could solve it. We were forced to choose a topic about saffron, while the people were claiming from a pests that damaged their products, I chose that and It was really effective for me .At first I was scared for dissolve the problem, but as soon as I started searching for it, I could find it and it made me stronger to accept risks.
Secondly, accepting new condition and new risks make us to create new opportunity for those who will not take the risks. I believe even the people fail in a situation, they will learn lots of valuable things from their fail and it will stimulate them to try more and create better life for them. For example, my father and my uncle had the same capital as their father give to them, but my father is one of the popular investments in our city even though he lost half of his capital in invention of Juice manufacturing. after he failed, he decided to try again with new experience. He succeed and never gives up. unfortunately, my uncle did not accept the risks and spend all of his money.
In conclusion, I am the opinion that when the people accept the risks, they will grow up and make a bright future for them. This scenario will lead people to a creative life. A challenged life would help people to be refreshed and happy.
- TPO-30 - Integrated Writing Task 80
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours. Use specific reasons and examples to suppo 60
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? To improve the quality of education, universities should spend money on salaries university professors. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 66
- In today's world, it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct. 76
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 71
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: For
...ning new things from their environment. for example; they know how they can prepare...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'things'' or 'thing's'?
Suggestion: things'; thing's
... essay. First of all, Trying to do new things means try to experiment new things, thi...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ment new things, this scenario will make people more strong and make them good ex...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a pest' or simply 'pests'?
Suggestion: a pest; pests
...on, while the people were claiming from a pests that damaged their products, I chose th...
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Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
... that and It was really effective for me .At first I was scared for dissolve the p...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: At
...hat and It was really effective for me .At first I was scared for dissolve the pro...
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...al in invention of Juice manufacturing. after he failed, he decided to try again with...
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Message: The pronoun 'He' must be used with a third-person verb: 'succeeds'.
Suggestion: succeeds
...ed to try again with new experience. He succeed and never gives up. unfortunately, my u...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, really, second, secondly, so, while, for example, i feel, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1773.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 395.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.48860759494 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39116034863 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.511392405063 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 540.9 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.3619143137 48.9658058833 138% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.65 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.75 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.05 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211955018288 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0660386963516 0.076458572812 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0665418208307 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133177025896 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0815152889588 0.0645574589148 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.76 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.38 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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