Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Undoubtedly, technology is one of the most important aspects of our life. Technology is very useful and profitable for comfortable and modern life. Technology has numerous effects on children, which some of them are positive and some are negative for children. Personally, I rather agree with the statement.
First, technology is interesting and attracting for children. One of the most widely spread technology is television. Television programs such as Cartoons and animations are highly attracting for children and children get massive influence from cartoon's heroes and celebrities, which was not in the past. Children like to imitate cartoon's characters speeches and acts. First decade of children life is vital period and in this time human character forms. Imitation is opposed with creativity and children with imitation of characters lose their creativity. When I was a child we play football in the garden every day, there was a TV cartoon that name was The Soccer. That was about the children that played football and after a lot of practice and effort they enrolled into national football team of Japan and they win international cup. The cartoon was amazing and we loved to watch it. After watching we went to garden but we did not play football. Actually, we only imitate and repeat the scene of the cartoon. We were interested to be a champion of football but without right practice that was impossible. After while we abandoned football and we started to learn Kong Fu because Panda was a Kong Fu master. Imitation is enemy of creativity. If we practice a lot and we had a good coach who could detect our talent and help us maybe we were able to be successful in sport.
Second, children spend a lot of their time to playing video games. Some of these games are harmful to children's brain and makers of these games always do not attention to growth of children creativity. Overwhelming in the play of these games lead children to be exhausted and also activity of these children are low. Creativity of children are related to activity and attempt to learning so spending more time to play with video games are waste of time and also harmful to children. Nowadays, children have a plenty of toys such as robot or electrical cars and dulls or even real cellphone. My father told me when he was in the primary school there was no toys for children and children in the village made their own toys by themselves. Girls made dull with wood and cloth and boys made wooden car. Children was very creative that time because there was nothing to play and they had to try to get their desire with making toys or homes with natural and simple materials.
In the comparison of today with the past children are less creative. In the modern life children learn to be consumer not a producer and this is one of the negative results of technology.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... the negative results of technology.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, may, second, so, while, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 34.0 15.1003584229 225% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 34.0 13.8261648746 246% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2370.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 492.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81707317073 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70967865282 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62349170098 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.477642276423 0.524837075471 91% => OK
syllable_count: 745.2 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.2761357407 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.724137931 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9655172414 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.1724137931 5.45110844103 40% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192772826981 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.059502317734 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0503143289038 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13423567351 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0280282056385 0.0645574589148 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.38 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.51 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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