Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Undoubtedly, the advent of modern technology has influenced people’s life from different aspects dramatically so much so that many lives or livelihoods have depended on this great innovation. However, whether technology has influenced people’s lives positively or not is open to debate. In this case, many believe that it has had some negative impacts on people in general and on children in particular. With this in mind, as far as I am concerned, although technology plays an important role in people’s life, it has had some negative impacts on them, especially on children, and one of aspects to which technology has been detrimental is children’s creativity because of several reasons, two of which are as follows.
Obviously, the ability to solve a problem on one’s own accord and to deep understand are the very qualities being important in creativity . Today, quite a few problems or questions with which children deal, whether to do their homework or to answer a question coming to their minds, have already been answered thanks to the state-of-the-art technology, the Internet so that they usually lack their passion to solve their questions or problems by themselves, to look for information, and to analyze problems thoroughly or eagerly since, only with one click, in the blink of an eye, they can find their problems’ answers, deterring their minds from being curious, logical, and creative . When it comes to searching on the Internet, it can be beneficial to one’s knowledge by reading information and ideas helpful to solve a problem. However, as for children, the answers of most their questions have already excited on the Internet, they will learn how to answer their questions not by analyzing and thinking deeply but by following their answers mindlessly, causing their being “shallow-minded.”
It goes without saying that any ingenious innovation has not been invented unless someone sensed lack of it, and, as today technology has made life more convenient than it used to be, children sense no need to invent or create something novel, inhibiting them from thinking about invention. To illustrate my point, I would like to provide an example. Great scientist and inventor of the telephone, Alexander Graham Bell, living in a period in which absence of an easy way to contact people was drastically sensed, leading to innovate such significant invention, the telephone. Such other innovations as the television, computer, the Internet, to name but a few, all invented when there was a desperate need for creating them, and with the objective that it facilitated the life. Hence, the sensation of creativity will decrease in children now life is becoming more convenient by virtue of technology.
To sum up, as far as I am concerned, technology has prevented children from fostering their creativity because of making them too lazy to think about and analyze a problem carefully needed to solve it and making their life more convenient, causing them to lack their enthusiasm to invent new things. By taking all the pros and cons of technology into account, it is a matter of opinion as to whether it has been to the benefit of children as a whole or not.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, however, if, look, so, thus, as for, as to, in general, in particular, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 84.0 52.1666666667 161% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2706.0 1977.66487455 137% => OK
No of words: 523.0 407.700716846 128% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17399617591 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78217453174 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.11614274035 2.67179642975 117% => OK
Unique words: 263.0 212.727598566 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502868068834 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 838.8 618.680645161 136% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 37.0 20.1344086022 184% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 151.79929351 48.9658058833 310% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 193.285714286 100.406767564 193% => OK
Words per sentence: 37.3571428571 20.6045352989 181% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.57142857143 5.45110844103 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.141415004041 0.236089414692 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.045763136966 0.076458572812 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0396318315655 0.0737576698707 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0825597078188 0.150856017488 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0109336792883 0.0645574589148 17% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.6 11.7677419355 184% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.92 58.1214874552 58% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.7 10.1575268817 174% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.3 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.97 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 86.8835125448 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 10.002688172 155% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.8 10.0537634409 167% => OK
text_standard: 22.0 10.247311828 215% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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