Wen it comes to the issue that whether modern equipment like telephone and email have made communication between people less personal, some people believe that these tools have positive effect on people’s connection. However, others have the opposite view. As far as I am concerned, the former point carries ore weight. I take this position on account the following reasons.
First and the most important reason is that telephone allows people to have connection with others, while they are far from of each others. I think that small example can give some light on this matter. I am living in a poor country, where not enough businesses and jobs are for all people, so my fathers like most people went to Western developed Countries. The long distance does not allow him to come back the home frequently and we usually see him only in Christmas day. Nevertheless, the telephone lets my father to stay in touch with their family and be aware of news. In this way, the telephone not only does not make communication less personal, but also assists people to keep their connection without regarding distance.
A further point we must consider is that email new communication device provide many unique facilities, which you never can access with traditional communication like face-to-face connection. The email allows users to share their photo and your experience with others, send and receive documents, make video conference, and so on. Each of these facilities helps people to keep their bond cohesive and personal. I think that there is not a better instance than my experience when I was studying in the university. At that time, I had worked on scientific project about fundamental particle, which related a branch of physics. I had to communicate with some professional teachers all over the world in order to solve many my scientific problems. The email allows me to send and receive texts and photos, and also I could to have video call with several of them at the same time. Eventually, not only I finished my project with assistance of the email, but also I make new acquaintances with several professional teachers, who I had never seen in the real world.
All above evidence supports this undeniable fact the modern communication tools allow people to stay in touch more frequently with their colleagues, relatives, friends, and family members. Admittedly, I hope that people be aware that the use of new devices for connection can not mean that we do not need traditional communication.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'nevertheless', 'regarding', 'so', 'while', 'i think']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.243010752688 0.229887763892 106% => OK
Verbs: 0.135483870968 0.158761421928 85% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0967741935484 0.0866891130778 112% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0645161290323 0.046263068375 139% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0731182795699 0.0685040099705 107% => OK
Prepositions: 0.124731182796 0.118717715034 105% => OK
Participles: 0.0129032258065 0.0351676179071 37% => Some participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.81611060272 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0279569892473 0.0309702414327 90% => OK
Particles: 0.00215053763441 0.00188951952338 114% => OK
Determiners: 0.0795698924731 0.0887237588012 90% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.010752688172 0.0209618222197 51% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.010752688172 0.0139019557991 77% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2513.0 2387.08602151 105% => OK
No of words: 418.0 408.028673835 102% => OK
Chars per words: 6.01196172249 5.86048508987 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52162009685 4.48200974243 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.320574162679 0.338922669872 95% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.248803827751 0.251872472559 99% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.181818181818 0.174417080927 104% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.138755980861 0.112833075102 123% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81611060272 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533492822967 0.524397521467 102% => OK
Word variations: 60.9441866032 59.2087087015 103% => OK
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6684587814 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.9 20.5533526081 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.7040809378 48.84282405 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.65 120.699889404 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9 20.5533526081 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.5 0.644075263715 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.54480286738 0% => OK
Readability: 45.7803827751 45.7405998639 100% => OK
Elegance: 1.3937007874 1.45489161554 96% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.332900704548 0.300154397459 111% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0649298006768 0.103427244359 63% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0482785893172 0.0752933317313 64% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.449294636758 0.497263757937 90% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.135308069086 0.151897553556 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113338792267 0.114077575197 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0735599551639 0.0781384742642 94% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.34468493371 0.336927656856 102% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0634995364823 0.067059652881 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.226421510509 0.210909579961 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0459165432012 0.0618886996521 74% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8870967742 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.86379928315 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.91756272401 163% => OK
Positive topic words: 7.0 8.42114695341 83% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.4623655914 122% => OK
Neutral topic words: 5.0 2.75985663082 181% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 13.6433691756 110% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.