Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Undoubtedly, advertisements are not only the best way the companies used to show their products but also the great opportunities for customer to learn about merchandizing. Personally, I believe the advertisement used to target young children are beneficial for families. I feel this way for two reasons, I will elaborate in the following essay.
To begin with, most young parent needs these types of commercials to learn about children’s products. Some parents have no experience in parenting, and they don’t know some types of food or the toy for their young children. However, by watching television commercials they can learn about some products and decide what to buy. To illustrate thoroughly, I remember two years ago when I had my first child; I was living far from my parents. My wife and I struggled to know which product to buy for our son. I used to watch advertisement to know the food and new children’s games to buy. Hadn’t I watched these programs; I would have missed out on the information.
Throughout the advertisement, parents can save some money. Some companies provide some coupons and discount through the TV commercials. Many brands on the market having a discount options can save one money and time. For example, when my son was four years old, I was always following children’s programs with him just to target the potential offers. I got the opportunities to receive some best deals on kid’s toys. I saved much money on my son's product just by watching adverts.In addition, Television’s adverts can’t influence children of age between two and four. For instance, my son didn’t care so much about the commercials, his focus was on his preferred programs. I believe this because he was so young to understand. As a result, the advert didn’t affect him personally; He was always focusing on his children's cartoons.
In conclusion, I firmly think that adverts targeting young children are very important especially for parents, because they can learn about the kid’s products and get some discount on some merchandise.
- In the United States it had been common practice since the late 1960s not to suppress natural forest fires The let it burn policy assumed that forest fire would burn themselves out quickly without causing much damage However in the summer of 1988 forest f 75
- writing 22 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Providing Internet access is just as important as other services such as building roads so governments should offer Internet access to all of their citizens at no cost Use specific reasons a 70
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement In twenty years there will be fewer cars in use than there are today Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 80
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Television advertising directed towards young children aged two to five should not be allowed Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 70
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Providing Internet access is just as important as other services such as building roads so governments should offer Internet access to all of their citizens at no cost Use specific reasons and examples 71
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 482, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: In
...y sons product just by watching adverts.In addition, Television’s adverts can’t i...
^^
Line 5, column 521, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
....In addition, Television’s adverts can’t influence children of age between two an...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, for example, for instance, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1734.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 340.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00224252978 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.544117647059 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 507.6 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.3226760548 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.7 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.2 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.119149238406 0.236089414692 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0417179399867 0.076458572812 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0421615864192 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0812659143729 0.150856017488 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0318139467899 0.0645574589148 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.0 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.