Most television advertising contains false information. But children do not understand what is wrong or right. Some people believe that television advertising towards younger children should be allowed because they think that this advertising might be a good source of entertainment. However, I strongly disagree with them and I believe that television advertising towards young children should not be allowed. I will explain my viewpoint with three reasons.
First of all, television advertising towards these children might negatively impact their actions. For example, if an advertisement shows a baby flying by eating their products, the children might want to do the same. In that case, he might be seriously injured by doing that all by himself. Children at this age are quite imitative. They do mostly what they see around them. That is why they should not be allowed to watch these superficial exaggerated things that show in a television advertisement.
Second of all, advertising could possibly lead children to buy an expensive product even when the parents could not afford it. For instance, expensive playing materials are always the most demanding things among young children. They don't understand whether their family can buy the product or not, Watching the product on television could make them ask for impossible demands from their parents.
Finally, television advertisements always exaggerate things. They show things which is far away from the original product. Children find it disappointing when they get a different product than what they see on television. It makes it harder for parents to make them understand what is happening. And the children are always accusing their parents of not bringing the actual thing that they saw on TV.
In conclusion, the issue of whether television advertising towards younger children should be allowed or not is complex. Some suggest that they should be allowed as they think that they don't understand what they are advertising. Nevertheless, I still contend that children of that age understand enough and that is highly manipulated by television advertising.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'could'.
Suggestion: could
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...nding things among young children. They dont understand whether their family can buy...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ould be allowed as they think that they dont understand what they are advertising. N...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, nevertheless, second, so, still, for example, for instance, in conclusion, first of all, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 52.1666666667 52% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1804.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 333.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.41741741742 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27180144563 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90646635035 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.495495495495 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 525.6 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.7893519919 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.0 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.1363636364 20.6045352989 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.04545454545 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 11.8709677419 25% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221059553011 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0819971447377 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0714392860662 0.0737576698707 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147431778496 0.150856017488 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0905533279634 0.0645574589148 140% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.56 10.9000537634 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.42 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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