Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Television advertising directed toward young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
With the development of mass media and TV shows, advertisement becomes an efficient way to attract consumers and profit to companies. Should these commercials directly target preschool children? From my vantage point, children are vulnerable to ad content rigidly. I will explain my reasons to oppose exposing advertisements to young kids in the following paragraphs.
Advertisement by using fantasy could easily persuade children, but they couldn't induce parents in the same way, which eventually creates tension between young kids and their parents. To put it in a vivid picture, child-oriented advertisements adopt some misleading techniques, like using magic and fantasy, exaggeration, etc. As a result, as innocent, immature individuals, children easily trust tempting but harmful things for them, such as junk food, gums, and cheese balls. In light of detrimental junk food, children become subject to malnutrition. Resisting in front of children's unreasonable demands, they face constant crying or screaming kids and probably lose their temper. As we see, the ads that targeted young children, cause so many stresses for all family members, and a mother has no choice but to endure her kid's crying or his/her health.
These conflicts are not limited to health issues. Sometimes children insist on buying something they see in advertisements, incompatible with financial status. While parents try to save money for a rainy day, the youngest member of family craving for an expensive toy, and use his/her weapon, tears and cries, to persuade his/her parent to buying that. If no restrictions establish to limit child-oriented ads, the companies naturally will follow their own profits because the tensions mentioned above are not their business.
Another reason why I advocate this notion lies in the fact that children tend to emulate everything they are faced with, and Some advertisements conclude dangerous actions. For example, once, my three-year-old niece was close to jumping or flying because he was convinced that he could fly like spiderman. Thank god, in this case, my sister had arrived and prevented this from happening, but these nonsense and dangerous events are already happening on a large scale because it is hard for children to distinguish reality from fantasy. Besides, they imitate everything.
Finally, children should spend their time learning productive abilities, making friends, creating their suitable community with their peers, and playing with each other. Absorbing in television would prevent kids from mental development and will keep them aloof and isolated. Such deviation from normal development immensely impacts children's social skills.
In conclusion, I totally disagree with exposing advertisements to children because they lead to tension and conflict in the family. They endanger children, physically and mentally, and prevent them from generating their abilities.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, finally, if, so, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in the same way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2344.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 412.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.68932038835 4.8611393121 117% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50530610838 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97172238658 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 262.0 212.727598566 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.635922330097 0.524837075471 121% => OK
syllable_count: 695.7 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.1714854508 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.545454545 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7272727273 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.68181818182 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165841443085 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0486299819672 0.076458572812 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0413464010217 0.0737576698707 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0925321593927 0.150856017488 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0400253525129 0.0645574589148 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 11.7677419355 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 58.1214874552 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.72 10.9000537634 144% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.74 8.01818996416 121% => OK
difficult_words: 136.0 86.8835125448 157% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.