Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Some people in the world think that the television advertisement is not the harsh things to the children, especially to the age range between two to five years, probably, because children learn different styles of language and help to become more smart. I, however, believe that such kinds of marketing is very detrimental for the children. There are several reasons why I feel this way, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, being more concerned young children especially before the age of five to the physiological and psychological transformation, they are not capable to think and detect whether what is good thing or bad thing. Therefore, their psychological aspects may be sharply influence. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. My niece, who is at the age of four year, indulged to many advertisements shown on the TV screen. So that she is unaware of every thing like food, playing, calling by her parents during the time of watching advertisements on the screen. This behavior made her parents to more frustrated and despondent. This clears that allowing such kinds of stuffs to the children might make more negative effects on the burgeoning young mind of children.
Second, by allowing to watch such kinds of advertisements, the children become more inactive physically because they are involved in this thing only. For instance, recent published paper on internet shows that most of the children before the age of five are negatively impacted by the TV advertisements because this makes them more inactive and not interested to play other physically active games that will be a more bad thing in future for their whole lives. Moreover, many different kinds of diseases may occur in the future, which is the more catastrophic condition for world.
Third, biing intimitated the the styles and doing same things like the models and heros shown in the advertisement, there may happen many intimidating accidents. To illustrate this, once an adertisement about a pesticides spraying in the field. My niece mimics same thing by taking pesticides on home. In this way, this may be very hazardous for the children health. This also indicates that it is very intricate thing to stall in society.
In conclusion, I strongly feel that by allowing disparate advertising materials on the TV to young children is more impair thing to them. This is because it could affect the children (age between two to five) by means of psychologically, physically, socially.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, may, moreover, second, so, therefore, third, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2097.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 412.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08980582524 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50530610838 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91951752374 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507281553398 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 653.4 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.3890755242 48.9658058833 138% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.85 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.172439578847 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0543180059601 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0457340728191 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11657587606 0.150856017488 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0530068971968 0.0645574589148 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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