Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
A controversial issue relating to whether Television should allow advertising direct to children or not, has been brought to the attention of parents. Relevant people believe that advertising is a new way to promote goods and people should em-braise it. In my opinion, Television should stop advertising goods to young children.
One of the reasons is because watching advertisements that Television promotes could harm children because they are not capable of distinguishing which item is good for them. Consequently, they will have the tendency to try everything. For example, to be more specific, if a child is exposed to advertisements of the junk food, they without a doubt will require trying that particular food. In addition, kids always are tempted by things that they see. Even though they do not clearly understand the benefits of that item, they will insist of obtaining the good Overall, this tells us that children can easily be attracted by any goods that they see on TV and since they cannot distinguish, they may harm themselves.
One other reason why advertising should not be allowed to be seen by children is because once children have seen the ads, it is going to be difficult for parents to change their children's minds of not having that item. For instance, five years ago when my nephew was three years old, he watched TV almost the half of the day. It happened that he saw one of the ads of one sort of chocolate which was promoted to be healthy for children. When he went to a shop with his mother he saw that particular item, and he wanted it. His mother read the ingredients and found out that the chocolate contained a preservative which her son was allergic. Therefore, she refused to buy it. However, my nephew got very upset and cried so much. His mother didn't know what to do. She was not able to convince him that the chocolate will make him ill. According to this experience, it will be hard for parents to convince their children that the item they saw on commercial will heart them. So, it is better than those ads not be presented.
In conclusion, TV advertisement should not be allowed to be seen by children. This is because children cannot distinguish which item is good for them, and because it is going to be difficult for parents to persuade their kids that the goods they saw on TV, which they will want it, are not good for them.
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Suggestion: trying
...food, they without a doubt will require to try that particular food. In addition, kids...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, so, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, sort of, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 15.1003584229 192% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 23.0 11.0286738351 209% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1914.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 412.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.64563106796 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50530610838 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64088824008 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.470873786408 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 572.4 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.8302602403 48.9658058833 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.0 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7272727273 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176037137487 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0605984187195 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0708700284445 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128121660058 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0508387303462 0.0645574589148 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.69 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.91 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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