Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Universities should give the same amount of money to their student's sports activities as they give to their universities libraries.
Human has different aspects of life, for instance, education, health, entertainment, and so on. While students consider their education as the most important one since it will have a great influence on their future lives. They need to be happy and healthy in order to reach their goals. Personally, I am an opinion that universities must devote part of their budget to student’s sports activities. This action has significant effects on students' happiness and health which will build a better futur for them. I am going to explore my point of view in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, can you study your courses in a good way if you do not feel enough energy? Or if you do not have fun times? Enhancing performance in their courses, students must have sufficient leasure time . In order to get to this point the better solution is to hold an sport activities beside student’s university courses. As you know every activity needs budget so it is important to allot a part of universities money to build and amend sport facilities, which will be used by students. I remember when I was at university, at fisrt, we did not have any sport complex not even a pool. One day,We heard that managments decided to construct a big stadium for the university. By that time, most of the student had felt energiless because the only activity they had in university was studying. However, after establishing the stadium, people started to enroll in various sport classes, and it helped them to have fun time in the university. The possitive effets of this action on students’ education illustrated the value of this action.
Secondly, we all agree on the fact that our education has undeniable influense on our future life especialy on our success in work. But, our healthiness is not less important than our education. We can not be a prosperous person if our hearts do not work properly. It proves the value of sport activity especially when we are in a highschool and university. So it is our universities’ management duty to prepare this activities infrastructure. My cousin was a great student in his university, even the best one. But he spend most of his life on studying his lessons. Since their university did not have any option and condition for doying any kind of exercise, he started to gain weight. After graduating from university, he bothered from obesity which causes his death. I lost my cousin because his university did not pay attention to its students sport activities.
To make the long story short, According to the aforementioned arguments it is crucial for each educational institution to build infrastructure for student’s sport activities and encourage them to participate in these classes. We must consider this action as important as our education since it affects our fututre life even more than our academic degrees.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...if you do not have fun times? Enhancing performance in their courses, students m...
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Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
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Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
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Line 2, column 280, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'activity'?
Suggestion: activity
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'activities'' or 'activity's'?
Suggestion: activities'; activity's
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Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'spends'.
Suggestion: spends
...s university, even the best one. But he spend most of his life on studying his lesson...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, second, secondly, so, while, for instance, kind of, you know, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2376.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 480.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68069463864 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93454365408 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.50625 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 756.0 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.7466717008 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.8571428571 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1428571429 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.32142857143 5.45110844103 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236567962991 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0653402071079 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0554580687252 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144000327496 0.150856017488 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0702693880893 0.0645574589148 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.13 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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