The management of the budget in university is always a tough problem. The leagues like sports team and dancing clubs requires lots of money to run every year, while the school also need to pay for professor and build new facilities like libraries. In my view, the educational affairs deserves more budget then sports and social activities.
To begin with, although extracurricular activities is significant in university, teaching and learning is the main theme in university. Most students would prefer having a better learning experience then improve the quality of sports and social programs. Take my self as an example, I love playing badminton but not a professional player. I enjoy playing badminton with friends casually rather than join the school teams and train for high intension. It's natural that educational services get more financial support then hobbies.
What's more, the sports clubs have more funding from outside compared to educational services like class and libraries. Many schools features one professional sports team that will join national competitions. These teams are so famous that some vendors like energy drink will sponsor them and the funding can cover the cost of court renting etc. , so they need less support to run. Social activities are similar. These activities either have sponsorship from related organizations or requires student to pay for themselves. By contrast, among the school services only construction of facilities like libraries have donation from alumni. The school still have to pay for hundreds of professors and faculty, which can be quite costly. Professors with tenure track enjoys high salaries, let alone the tremendous research funding of their labs.
To sum up, the social activities and sports in university is less important then educational services, which is the core of university education. Plus they have more outside sponsorship compared to classes and constructions. Sports and social programs deserves funding, but not as much as classes and libraries in my opinion.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ducational affairs deserves more budget then sports and social activities. To begin...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, still, then, while, in my opinion, in my view, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 43.0788530466 37% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1722.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 319.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.39811912226 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82065484418 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.567398119122 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 522.0 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.9979411141 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.1 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.95 20.6045352989 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.156248166089 0.236089414692 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0524859611833 0.076458572812 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0433073491974 0.0737576698707 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107095138541 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0490380064497 0.0645574589148 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.74 10.9000537634 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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