Whether Unicersity should prepare students for high paying careers or not, is a conterversall topic in our community. Some people, if asked, they would say that university should boost students skills to match high paying jobs. Others disagree with the statement as they believe that universities duty is to advance students knoweledge and skills. As fare I'm concerned, I agree with the later opinion. The basis for my views is as the following.
Students should be passionate for their jobs, not just looking for a high paying salary. If the students are not interesting in their career and just looking only for high salary job, they may face challenges and difficulties in their career. For example, because pharmacists income is one of the highest in our country, a friend of mine joined pharmacy just to augment his income. Since he had no passionate to pharmacy school, he had some dificulties understand pharmaceutical subjects and he was not able to finish pharmacy school. As a result, he wasted his time and money instead of working hard on a career he interested in. If he direct his focus for a job he love, he could make more money and gain more skills.
In addition, money is not the only motiviation. working in a high paying career could be frostrating and boring. if you don't have the welling to endure work strees, students may give-up or losses their enthusiasm. Of course there is no doubt that indviduals get so excited and so enthusiastic when they reveive a big chques. However, after while, they find it impossible to contniue on their job. For example, my friend has been offered a decient paying job as a pharmaceutical company as a supervisor representative. Even though she was so encourage to work hard at the begening, she found her job so stressful and impractical. As a result, she quite her job and joined different career eventhough with a lower salary.
Finally, students should be good at what they do. It Should be acknowledged that good information, powerfull skills and hard worker are the only people who able to make money. Forcing the students to study something that they do not like at school may have some negative consequences. For instance, Pharmacists who worked hard to help their patients are more likely gian more famous and more money than those who are just looking to sale medical products to their patients.
As a conclusion, although money play an important factor in people lives, it is not the reason for the students to spend all thier years at the university to be trained to make money. Students should foucs their power on how to bosst their skills, their infrmation and get familier with their passionate career. As a result, they well gain more money than those who are intrested in money only.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: Some people, if asked, they would say that university should boost students skills to match high paying jobs.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to students and skills
Sentence: Others disagree with the statement as they believe that universities duty is to advance students knoweledge and skills.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to universities and duty
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to students and knoweledge
students may give-up or losses their enthusiasm
students may give-up or lose their enthusiasm
offered a decient paying job as a pharmaceutical company as a supervisor representative.
offered a decient paying job in a pharmaceutical company as a supervisor representative.
Even though she was so encourage to work hard
Even though she was so encouraged to work hard
money play an important factor
money plays an important factor
Sentence: Whether Unicersity should prepare students for high paying careers or not, is a conterversall topic in our community.
Error: conterversall Suggestion: ?
Sentence: Others disagree with the statement as they believe that universities duty is to advance students knoweledge and skills.
Error: knoweledge Suggestion: knowledge
Sentence: Since he had no passionate to pharmacy school, he had some dificulties understand pharmaceutical subjects and he was not able to finish pharmacy school.
Error: dificulties Suggestion: difficulties
Sentence: In addition, money is not the only motiviation. working in a high paying career could be frostrating and boring. if you don't have the welling to endure work strees, students may give-up or losses their enthusiasm.
Error: motiviation Suggestion: motivation
Error: frostrating Suggestion: frustrating
Sentence: Of course there is no doubt that indviduals get so excited and so enthusiastic when they reveive a big chques.
Error: indviduals Suggestion: individuals
Error: reveive Suggestion: receive
Error: chques Suggestion: chases
Sentence: However, after while, they find it impossible to contniue on their job.
Error: contniue Suggestion: continue
Sentence: For example, my friend has been offered a decient paying job as a pharmaceutical company as a supervisor representative.
Error: decient Suggestion: decent
Sentence: Even though she was so encourage to work hard at the begening, she found her job so stressful and impractical.
Error: begening Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: As a result, she quite her job and joined different career eventhough with a lower salary.
Error: eventhough Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: It Should be acknowledged that good information, powerfull skills and hard worker are the only people who able to make money.
Error: powerfull Suggestion: powerful
Sentence: For instance, Pharmacists who worked hard to help their patients are more likely gian more famous and more money than those who are just looking to sale medical products to their patients.
Error: gian Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: As a conclusion, although money play an important factor in people lives, it is not the reason for the students to spend all thier years at the university to be trained to make money.
Error: thier Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Students should foucs their power on how to bosst their skills, their infrmation and get familier with their passionate career.
Error: foucs Suggestion: focus
Error: bosst Suggestion: boost
Error: familier Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: infrmation Suggestion: information
Sentence: As a result, they well gain more money than those who are intrested in money only.
Error: intrested Suggestion: interested
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 15 2
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 22 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 15 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 475 350
No. of Characters: 2232 1500
No. of Different Words: 226 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.668 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.699 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.633 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 157 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 100 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 70 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 45 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.792 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.952 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.625 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.28 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.496 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.125 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 285, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'universities'' or 'university's'?
Suggestion: universities'; university's
...with the statement as they believe that universities duty is to advance students knoweledge ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 357, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
...students knoweledge and skills. As fare Im concerned, I agree with the later opini...
^^
Line 3, column 669, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'loves'.
Suggestion: loves
...in. If he direct his focus for a job he love, he could make more money and gain more...
^^^^
Line 5, column 49, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Working
...ion, money is not the only motiviation. working in a high paying career could be frostr...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 114, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...career could be frostrating and boring. if you dont have the welling to endure wor...
^^
Line 5, column 121, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...could be frostrating and boring. if you dont have the welling to endure work strees,...
^^^^
Line 5, column 410, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e to contniue on their job. For example, my friend has been offered a decient pay...
^^
Line 7, column 153, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a able'.
Suggestion: who is a able
...lls and hard worker are the only people who able to make money. Forcing the students to ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 363, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...t, they well gain more money than those who are intrested in money only.
^^^^^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['finally', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'may', 'so', 'thus', 'well', 'while', 'for example', 'for instance', 'in addition', 'no doubt', 'of course', 'as a result']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.229007633588 0.229887763892 100% => OK
Verbs: 0.169847328244 0.158761421928 107% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0801526717557 0.0866891130778 92% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0496183206107 0.046263068375 107% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0839694656489 0.0685040099705 123% => OK
Prepositions: 0.114503816794 0.118717715034 96% => OK
Participles: 0.0400763358779 0.0351676179071 114% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.71960835306 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0324427480916 0.0309702414327 105% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.074427480916 0.0887237588012 84% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0229007633588 0.0209618222197 109% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.013358778626 0.0139019557991 96% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2772.0 2387.08602151 116% => OK
No of words: 473.0 408.028673835 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.86046511628 5.86048508987 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66353547975 4.48200974243 104% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.342494714588 0.338922669872 101% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.247357293869 0.251872472559 98% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.16067653277 0.174417080927 92% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.103594080338 0.112833075102 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71960835306 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.488372093023 0.524397521467 93% => OK
Word variations: 55.9540484697 59.2087087015 95% => OK
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6684587814 126% => OK
Sentence length: 18.1923076923 20.5533526081 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.9188638633 48.84282405 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.615384615 120.699889404 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1923076923 20.5533526081 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.576923076923 0.644075263715 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.54480286738 162% => OK
Readability: 42.9280370792 45.7405998639 94% => OK
Elegance: 1.2641509434 1.45489161554 87% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.274949534653 0.300154397459 92% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.109135960656 0.103427244359 106% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.10418765477 0.0752933317313 138% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.428435654138 0.497263757937 86% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.108758476994 0.151897553556 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.092944155748 0.114077575197 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0561307004502 0.0781384742642 72% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.292368885153 0.336927656856 87% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0869763779704 0.067059652881 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186377614254 0.210909579961 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.07919429082 0.0618886996521 128% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8870967742 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.86379928315 207% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.91756272401 81% => OK
Positive topic words: 11.0 8.42114695341 131% => OK
Negative topic words: 8.0 2.4623655914 325% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.75985663082 72% => OK
Total topic words: 21.0 13.6433691756 154% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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