Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Watching television is bad for children. Use specific details and examples to support your answer.
Everything created on earth have advantage and disadvantage, it's depends on humankind to exploit it or utilise it. kids are too little to identify if a thing is bad or good for them. In my opinion, watching television is not beneficial for offsprings. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, in this digital era, every home have television and almost we all are addicted to tv programs. Consequently, our kids also follow us. sometimes children spent whole holiday in front of television. they do not even do homework, which is serious issue all around. watching too much television have impacts on their study. As a result they get low score in academic records. according to a survey, kids nowadays used to watch television eighty percent than in past. my own experience is the evidence of this. I grew up in a rural area without access television so i spent my spare time reading books and another activities.
Moreover, children watching more television have greater health issues. Because they just sit in front of tv so they becomes more and more lazy. On the other hand, kids, which play outdoor games are physically fit. they play with their peers,cousins,run after each other are more active.To exemplify, i have two kids. we usually go to parks after finishing their homework. In the park we have fun,they meet their classmates,discuss many things. Both of two my kids have perfect eyesight because they don't addicted to screen.
In addition,kids today, watch a lot of cartoons films and try to imitate them after. sometime they demand for expensive electronic devices and create trouble for their parent, who can't afford such expensive device. according to Oxford research team at present, toys company are at the peak, develope successful business. These company advertise their product on television and then kids demand to get them.
In conclusion, I tend to say that keep away children from television are great idea. television not only affect their study but also make them less active, influence their eye sight.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, if, moreover, so, then, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1759.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 349.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04011461318 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32221490584 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77102104779 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.618911174785 0.524837075471 118% => OK
syllable_count: 546.3 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 22.736365314 48.9658058833 46% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 67.6538461538 100.406767564 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.4230769231 20.6045352989 65% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.57692307692 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 28.0 5.5376344086 506% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.159232061554 0.236089414692 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0454582322854 0.076458572812 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0442669263508 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0923086531973 0.150856017488 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0443562977725 0.0645574589148 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.28 58.1214874552 100% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.36 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.