Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Despite young people nowadays are much busier than before, it dose not necessarily mean that they do not help their communities. Therefore, I disagree with the statement that young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities. Instead, they use different ways to contribute their communities.
To begin with, it is true that young people today are really busy, due to the rapid pace of the society. Thus, if they want to make sure that they are competitive enough in the society, they would have to spend additional time to increase their abilities, such as self-learning etc. For example, I have a friend, Ian, he studied finance when he was in university. Yet when he started working, he realized that a lot of his coworkers know programming, which helps them analyze financial data more quickly. To make sure that he would not be the next employee being supplanted, he decided to use his leisure time to learn how to write codes on the Internet. Since then, he does not have enough time to do things other than learning.
Although young people now have less leisure time to contribute the communities that we traditionally define, like helping other residents who live in the same area, with the help of the Internet, they can use other ways to help new types of communities. Since the Internet has shortened the distance between people, helping communities is not restricted in the traditional way. Young people today can provide their advice for people who need help, which forms unconventional communities. For instance, my friend Ian again. During the time that he was learning programming, he received a lot of help from different anonymous users on the Internet, such as teaching him how to debugging or giving him advices for his working issues. And later on, when he became strong enough, he turned to help other people too. Under this relationship, a new type of communities, people who want to learn coding, are formed.
In conclusion, though most young people do not have as much time to help traditional communities as before, they are still helping their communities, but in a very different way.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 63, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'doses'?
Suggestion: doses
...owadays are much busier than before, it dose not necessarily mean that they do not h...
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Line 5, column 561, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to program', 'to programme'.
Suggestion: to program; to programme
...n. During the time that he was learning programming, he received a lot of help from differe...
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Line 5, column 889, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to code'.
Suggestion: to code
...f communities, people who want to learn coding, are formed. In conclusion, though m...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, really, so, still, then, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, it is true, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1787.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 361.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95013850416 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74349567482 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.512465373961 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 554.4 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.0197323937 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.117647059 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2352941176 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.47058823529 5.45110844103 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.289792561121 0.236089414692 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114172336558 0.076458572812 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.124731577078 0.0737576698707 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.230255891384 0.150856017488 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.103413623926 0.0645574589148 160% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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