Activities at school has attracted much social concern. Some educational experts suggested that sports and social activities at universities and colleges have the same importance as classes and they should receive equal financial support. Personally, I strongly, agree with the argument.
On the one hand, what has been put under consideration is studying efficiency. The fact is that sports or outdoor activities creates chances for students to have breaks after classes. Therefore, it is possible for them refresh themselves and get relaxed after a hard-working time. As a result, students are supposed to free their mind and it stands as a key factor to have a creative thinking to study better. Consequently, social activities play a crucial role in stimulating the improvement of study productivity. More importantly, it cannot be denied that if students take part in recreational activities at school, they will be exposed with a variety of different situations. It leads to a fact that there is a likelihood for them to reflect themselves and be aware of their strength and weakness. On that ground, needless to say, it is able for them to gradually fill their gap in capability. As a consequence, students are certain to make progress in raising their study performance. By and large, it is highly likely that attending social activities is a good idea for students.
On the other hand, some people might say that involving in physical activities at school takes students so much time. Accordingly, it sets extremely stress on students since they do not have enough time for finishing exercises and reviewing information. However, it is just applicable to a minority. It widely know that schools only allow an appropriate numbers and limited types of social activities. Hence, students can both have their attendance on their favorite activities and put everything under control. Furthermore, by putting a hand in social activities, students stands a golden chance to meet and interact with a lot of people. Correspondingly, it is apparent that they are bound to widen their range of relationship. For this reason, students have more opportunities to receive many supports from others in their studying. This, in turn, forms a significant contribution to enhancing their proficiency. Subsequently, it is more easy for them to be admired by other people and to be made up with satisfactory feelings. Beyond any doubt, the idea that taking part in social activities brings extremely stress to students is possible end in collapse.
All the factors mentioned above are evidence supporting my agreement. It is strongly recommended that everyone should take my writing into careful consideration in order to make an suitable decision on attending activities at school.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, consequently, furthermore, hence, however, if, so, therefore, as a result, by and large, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2343.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 443.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28893905192 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58776254615 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09342394291 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.541760722348 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 731.7 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.0713098994 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.1153846154 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0384615385 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.76923076923 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193643124146 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0539524183251 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.070987231266 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163288584125 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.121827021369 0.0645574589148 189% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 86.8835125448 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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