Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Children rely too much on the technology, like computers, smart phones, video games for fun and entertainment. Playing simpler toys or playing outside with friends would be better for children’s development
Nowadays, there is a debate among parents whether children have to spend their time with technological devices or not. In my opinion, children must be away from technology and do simpler activities. That is due to increasing the social connection, physical activities making them healthire and they must accept their mistakes in real life.
First and foremost, when children obligate to play with their friends, they must learn how make a good connection; therefore, it is the cause of improving their interrelation. In other words, the children among their entertainments will be trainded social relationship by other friends. For example, when i was a student in primary school, one of my friends had been quited on everydays. After my investigation, i knew that he has been alone at home for 5 years because he was single child. thus, he could not make relation with other children. Thus, having time with other friends make you more sociable.
Second, i think that physical activities have an important role in our healthy. To put it differently, when you play outside and your plays are needed exercise, you will be able to have a healthy body. For instance, i had had a healthy body before i quitted playing soccer in our school. Consequently, the physical activities help to be healthier instead of entertainments related to technology.
as outlined above, i definitley disagree with limiting children to do technological activities. That is because of they must become sociable and to be healtheir rather than another situation.
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- TPO 43- integrated writing 80
- TPO 41- task 1 76
- Some people like to buy and eat their meals at restaurants frequently while others like to do this at home. Which do you prefer? Why? 60
- Some people like to buy and eat their meals at restaurants frequently while others like to do this at home. Which do you prefer? Why? 60
- Many people may work at home with modern technology. Some people claim that it benefits only workers, but not employers. To what extent do you agree or disagree? 66
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...hip by other friends. For example, when i was a student in primary school, one of...
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Suggestion: Thus
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...riends make you more sociable. Second, i think that physical activities have an ...
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...e to have a healthy body. For instance, i had had a healthy body before i quitted...
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...stance, i had had a healthy body before i quitted playing soccer in our school. C...
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Suggestion: As
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Message: Probable usage error. Use 'because they' instead.
Suggestion: because they
...to do technological activities. That is because of they must become sociable and to be healthei...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, if, second, so, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, i think, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1289.0 1977.66487455 65% => OK
No of words: 251.0 407.700716846 62% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13545816733 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98032404683 4.48103885553 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98260327348 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 212.727598566 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.605577689243 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 396.9 618.680645161 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.535214387 48.9658058833 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.9333333333 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7333333333 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.93333333333 5.45110844103 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243300396741 0.236089414692 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0820885459245 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0521200834721 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141318794574 0.150856017488 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0220345945259 0.0645574589148 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 86.8835125448 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
More content wanted.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.