Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The education system is the most important system, and the key element to build the best generations. Moreover, students nowadays face a lot of challenges in their life and their education because they use a lot of things for a long period of time like their cell phones, online games, and social networking Web site. And from my point of view all the previous activities make the educational system harder than the past, and the impact of my view will be analyzed in this essay for further enlighten.
First of all, the using of cell phones, online games, and social Web site is a double edge sword.On the on hand, students spend a lot of time in these tools without actual goals or benefits,that lead to decrease the studying hours. For example, when we bought the first computer with internet connection we spent a huge time playing games like candy crush and others.
secondly, students become more distracted in their classes and studying time and they are overthinking about finishing their homework to return playing or surfing the internet, and there are many proven statistics indicate that the student grad point averages declined by the unreasonable using. For instance my youngest brother has played all the time on his mobile phone and the ultimate result was very low marks on his exams, so my parents collaborate with each other to solve this problem by identify a specific time for using his mobile phone and banning any up normal behaviors, after a month his marks return to the normal status.
In conclusion, I think my opinion is strong and solid enough to clarify all the previous reasons that I mentioned above, and I believe that we have to be very careful with dealing with pupils and to take a real steps to tackle this situation.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: period
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Message: Did you mean 'website'?
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1460.0 1977.66487455 74% => OK
No of words: 304.0 407.700716846 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80263157895 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47550325055 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.582236842105 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 456.3 618.680645161 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 20.6003584229 39% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 38.0 20.1344086022 189% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 74.045594062 48.9658058833 151% => OK
Chars per sentence: 182.5 100.406767564 182% => OK
Words per sentence: 38.0 20.6045352989 184% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.25 5.45110844103 243% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.204576293876 0.236089414692 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0787226521515 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.053452249286 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110515060435 0.150856017488 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0420959047963 0.0645574589148 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.2 11.7677419355 172% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.37 58.1214874552 71% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.9 10.1575268817 166% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.52 8.01818996416 119% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 17.2 10.0537634409 171% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 10.247311828 166% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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