Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
For the successful development of a country, it is more important for a government to spend money on the education of very young children (five to ten years old) than to spend money on universities.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Kids are the future of the country, and education is the most important field to potentiate human energy. I strongly agree with this statement For the successful development of a country, it is more important for a government to spend money on the education of very young children (five to ten years old) than to spend money on universities. I hold this opinion for many reasons I will discuss it below.
To start with, when the government spends the money to improve the education of the kids it is the best investment to the money and the human resources, when the country gets a highly educated generation we will ensure our future will be stable, peaceful, and productive. one day I read about the history of Indonesia they had bad days, the government was corrupted and the gangsters invade the community, then after a revolution, the president changed the new president starts with the education he believed if the county has a highly educated kid the future will be better. we can see the improvement that happened in Indonesia today, it's one of the advanced countries in all fields.
second, The kids need the facilities to increase their tendency to learn more, they do not know yet what the benefit of being highly educated people. Therefore, we have to spend a lot of money to hook these kids to study, I think it is too expensive to raise a learned, political, productive kids because they need proper learning facilities and highly educated teachers, and clean advanced schools.
Last but not the least, the government should supply other important requirements to the kids to ensure they will get the optimal education, like the food served in the schools, the uniforms, the books and the other learning requirements. while this is not the government responsibility to supply these requirements to the universities students.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, second, so, then, therefore, while, i think, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1535.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 311.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93569131833 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19942759058 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80600378123 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.530546623794 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 480.6 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 20.6003584229 49% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.1344086022 154% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 80.9632015177 48.9658058833 165% => OK
Chars per sentence: 153.5 100.406767564 153% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.1 20.6045352989 151% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.7 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.343282004252 0.236089414692 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.139198033375 0.076458572812 182% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.230589627435 0.0737576698707 313% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.21854129174 0.150856017488 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.233409834168 0.0645574589148 362% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.4 11.7677419355 148% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.47 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.0537634409 143% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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