Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
We live in an era of time that witnessing rapid changes in all the facet of life. The controversial question which arises is how children are able to keep up with such fast pace? A plethora of people is in the conviction that this vulnerable segment of modern societies learns how to become more independent. Contrary to this popular belief, there are those who take this point of view that the young people are dependent on their family same as the past. I am of the opinion that, the first group thinks more thoroughly, and the following explanation will further elaborate on this perspective.
First and foremost, there is no denying to the fact that accessibility to wide range of information becomes an integral part of the contemporary communities. Advance educational system is the primary development which has familiarized children with new world since the early ages. Nowadays, there are particular experiments that revealed the children’s' talents. Therefore, the path of their life is determined through the instinctive capabilities. While in the past, children usually forced to continue the inherited jobs which almost had nothing to do with their interest or abilities. Besides, technological advance in search engine and particularly the Internet are accounted as other useful tools which plays prominence role in transferring the information to the current children. Undoubtedly, there is no need that they ask every single question that they may have from their parents. Instead, they type that words in Google and figure out the best answer for their requirements. Admittedly, their dependency to the parents reduces incredibly.
Another vital fact that should be taken into consideration is that civilized societies have undergone fundamental alterations in the family structure. In this period, children is raising in families that both of the parents works; consequently, they have to learn how to cook, how to take care of themselves, how to make critical decisions and so forth. Obviously, it is not surprising if they become soon independence. Whereas, in the past kids spent most of their time at least with their mother, while the father of the family did not work as much as today\s father works. Furthermore, due to paramount importance of this issue that children are alone in most of the stages of their lives, they usually decide to live separately from their parents as soon as possible. That is why in many countries juveniles start their independent life when they are 18 year old and this is critical factor that distinguish the modern children from their past genera
On the basis of the point mentioned above, I am convinced that there are many convincing reasons for the independency of today’s young people. Indeed, they not only have access to diverse kind of information but also place in circumstances that force them to choose live independently from low-ages.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 272, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to live'
Suggestion: to live
...circumstances that force them to choose live independently from low-ages.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, consequently, first, furthermore, if, may, so, therefore, whereas, while, as to, at least, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 23.0 11.0286738351 209% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2445.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 472.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18008474576 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6610686524 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94360033441 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 264.0 212.727598566 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.559322033898 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 767.7 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.994623655914 201% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.5173710804 48.9658058833 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.428571429 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4761904762 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.61904761905 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217901724853 0.236089414692 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0559801498765 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0536986610982 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118005161706 0.150856017488 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0271282831294 0.0645574589148 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 86.8835125448 144% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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