By and large, every person in the world has been creating his/her life with the decisions which s/he makes. These decisions are directly related to the thought and condition living. There are many controversial debates about when young people better able to make their decisions about their own life. While some people claim that the youth are better able to make decisions about their own lives, the others oppose this idea and believe that in the past young people could do it too. To my way of thinking, the young people have better chance to make their decisions by their own because not only so dependent to the family is decreased that they can think freely, but also societies bring up a situation for deciding independent easily.
The first reason which should be stated here is that parents, especially fathers, were the foundation of each person's life and no one could not disagree with him, actually that was a kind of dictatorship. If people did not do his intention, they would be rejected by the family members which means no support in life that made living intolerable. The support of the family and acceptance by them was very crucial in the past and without their support, there were rejected even by the people in the town. For instance, my father's grandmother has an aunt who lived in Moscow, in her teenager's years she felt in love with a man and the fathers of both of them were unintended to marry with each other; however, they did and they lost the support of their families. They did not have money for continuing their life and they could not find a job and eventually they dead in the snow and cold weather of the Russia.
The other point worth discussing here is that in the past the economy of the families was based on the farming and shepherd, so children were brought up and grown up to help their parents in their profession. Today, with developing technology and creating various job opportunities each person is working in his/her interested profession and teenagers are not forced to learn the job of their parents. To exemplify, my grandfather was working in grapes garden of his father unlike his wish, he had no chance to make a decision about his job, his house and even the girl who wanted to married. This was a tradition in their culture to get a wife at the age of 20 for men and get a husband for women at the age of 15. The society did not let them to make their own decide and seek their own wishes.
To put all in one, the dictatorship of the families and especially fathers and the condition of the societies were mixed to force the youth to adjust even their personal and unimportant prefers based on the family and society forces.
- TPO-40 - Independent Writing Task Some parent offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school Do you think this is a good idea?Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 70
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives. 73
- TPO-40 - Independent Writing Task Some parent offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school Do you think this is a good idea?Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 111, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...ly fathers, were the foundation of each persons life and no one could not disagree with...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, however, if, so, while, for instance, kind of, by and large
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2207.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 481.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.58835758836 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68313059816 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40744490971 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.471933471933 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 683.1 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.8267409043 48.9658058833 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.9375 100.406767564 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.0625 20.6045352989 146% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.4375 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.39451599939 0.236089414692 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.141596346207 0.076458572812 185% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.138150681004 0.0737576698707 187% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.226863734158 0.150856017488 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.19237477349 0.0645574589148 298% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 11.7677419355 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.95 58.1214874552 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.93 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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