Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
From a broad perspective, in the current state of affair we face, in which so complex become lives that contentment in life can be accounted as the ultimate goal for most of the people. Therefore, it is not far-fetched to presume that occupying() with a decent job can plat crucial role to that end. However, which kind of job brings more satisfaction for juveniles is considered as a contentious issue. There is a growing segment of people who contend this idea that similarities among the youths' job and their parent provide a variety of advantages for them. I personally dispute() with this idea, and in the ensuing paragraph, the rationale behind this opinion will be further elaborated.
FIrst and foremost, we live in era of time that youn people are rather knwoledgeable. There is no denying to the fact that thanks to availability of a wide array of information, the public awareness has multiplies enormously(). Indeed, with the advent of the Internet, societies uttessed revolutionart alterations in diverse facets of community, particularly the family structure. Before that time, the large, extended familiyes took steps in the path which seemingly was destined for them; therefore, the children had no other choice but pursuing their parents occupation. As a matter of fact, they had not sufficient knowledge regarding other option which migh have and conseunelty, no matter they were inclined to spend their lives in that job or not. On the other hand, nowadays, provide the young individuals are able to take advantages of various information provided by diverse kind of social networks, satelites, TV programs in order to broaden their knowledge. Having choose their job based on both abundant information and their interest, juveniles can construct bright future for themselves.
Another vital point which should be taken into consideration is the a wide range of jobs that are available for young people. Needless to say that the nature of jobs variesd significantly. Take a simple job such as accounting as an examlpe. Previsouly, if a person was supposed to become accountant, he would commerce his job andgradually, got acquaitend with all aspect of this career. Conversely, there are so many branches in the accounting field which each one requires acquiring specific knowledge and have entirely dictinct path. Subsequenly, the more specilized become jobs, the more options children have to make a choice among. It comes as no surprise that alonge with these issue, owing to the presence of a dozen of new technologies and sicences, thre are a plethora of jobs which could not have been existed in the past.
To wrap it up, it is more judicious to say that children no longer get benefit by continuing their parent occupation. Not only their awareness and knowledge have been expanded, but also there are more alternative for them as a future job.
- TPO 27 integrated writing : Little Ice Age 90
- TPO 25 90
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Suggestion:
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Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'alternatives'?
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... been expanded, but also there are more alternative for them as a future job.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, conversely, first, however, if, regarding, so, therefore, kind of, such as, as a matter of fact, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2400.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 471.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09554140127 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65859790218 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89534334042 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 265.0 212.727598566 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.562632696391 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 765.0 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.0907668386 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.285714286 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4285714286 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.95238095238 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.271234424868 0.236089414692 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0808261441941 0.076458572812 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0605186052437 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173800890946 0.150856017488 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00793002895079 0.0645574589148 12% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.15 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 132.0 86.8835125448 152% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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