Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In today's fast-paced and technology-oriented world, the amount of information which is surrounded any individual is really large. With this in mind, there is a controversy whether people should follow all of this news about occurence around the world or otherwise. I, personally, do believe that people should be aware of these events, for two reasons elaborated below.
To begin with, every event can teach people an experience. There is a well-known novelist, his name eludes me at this moment, once said, " There is a lesson inside of any event." Therefore, watching this news tend to increase our awareness and help us to live a happy and prosperous life. For example, in our country, there was a limitation for women who wanted to drive a car. Yet, by following what happens in other countries these rules changed in our country. On the contrary, if we had not followed the news, how could we have changed?
Equally important is the emerging a healthy competition among countries. Needless to say, Any society wants s to provide a better standard of life for their residents. For instance, when a country tries to improve their transportation system and use the cutting-edge technology in order to decline weather pollution, other countries may encourage to change their system as well. By isolation and ignoring what happened in other parts of the world, however, hardly can anyone guarantee such beneficial improvement.
In the light of these critical results, I am of the opinion that knowing about events occurred in other parts of the world have some benefits for us. By so doing, not only we can compete with other countries and improve our lives' standard, but also we can learn these events lessons and increase our experience.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Equally,
...he news, how could we have changed? Equally important is the emerging a healthy com...
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Line 5, column 348, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'changing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'encourage' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: changing
...ollution, other countries may encourage to change their system as well. By isolation and ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, really, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance, on the contrary, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1470.0 1977.66487455 74% => OK
No of words: 291.0 407.700716846 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05154639175 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13022058845 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84598744698 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.635738831615 0.524837075471 121% => OK
syllable_count: 461.7 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.934381556 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.0 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7857142857 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.21428571429 5.45110844103 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.134054455222 0.236089414692 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0473005002044 0.076458572812 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0350391227076 0.0737576698707 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.083209664073 0.150856017488 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0251239682903 0.0645574589148 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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