Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork, which of the two approaches do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is an incontrovertible fact that in today's hectic life, parents cannot always be in the company of their children. In this regard, there is a controversy whether children should use the time, which their parents do not present, for doing schoolwork or playing games and sports. I, personally, do believe that sports and entertainment can have more privilege than schoolwork has for several reasons--that is learning social skills, get experience with healthy competition, and decline stress--which are elaborated upon hereunder.
To begin with, sports, games, or any kinds of entertainment tend to bring about children's prosperity in their future life. Of so deep influences are the results of playing, physical or mental, on a child's social skills that learning them can bringing up them as an independent person. Teamwork, for example, is so vital a skill that anybody should learn it during childhood. If a person does not have an opportunity to learn it, indeed, he or she will not be able to perform as a useful person for society in general and for themselves in particular. As a result, their occupation, friendship, relationship, to name but a few will be affected. In schoolwork, however, the presence of a mature individual for monitoring will be necessary.
Additionally, in today's state-of-the-art world, competition is an integral part of a successful and prosperous life. Needless to say, every subject is of two opposite aspects, failure and triumph. Indubitably, game or sports is an excellent opportunity to experience such sensitive situations. Strange as it may seem, I am of the opinion that human beings without experience failure for a less important problem - such as sports during childhood - cannot withstand hard situations which will be faced in the future. Accordingly, such healthy competition atmosphere which is nothing short of practicing failure and triumph tend to prepare children for the future and pave the way towards their success.
Last but not least, all people deserve to live a happy, peaceful, and amazing life. Nowadays, people's lives have been affected by stress, a consequence of hectic lifestyle, and children are not an exception. It is crystal clear that in order for a child to be successful and be able to perform in an excellent manner, a peace and happy circumstance should be prepared for them. Sports not only can revive their energy to have an excellent academic performance but also can help them to eliminate any stress and anxiety. There is little doubt, hardly can be guaranteed a child's success and flourish who is always in a stressful atmosphere.
In the light of these crucial criteria, I strictly am of the opinion that sports and game can give rise to pivotal consequences for children. As far as I am concerned, these results not only can improve children's communication skills and prepare them for competition in the future real-world life but can help them alleviate tension as well. Therefore, it is essential for parents and children alike do not take this “Golden time” for granted.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'bring'
Suggestion: bring
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Message: Consider replacing "in an excellent manner" with adverb for "excellent"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, however, if, may, so, therefore, well, as for, for example, in general, in particular, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 13.8261648746 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2574.0 1977.66487455 130% => OK
No of words: 499.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15831663327 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72634191566 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05179895123 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 263.0 212.727598566 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527054108216 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 787.5 618.680645161 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.806298062 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.0 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6818181818 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.63636363636 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154109293184 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0492539988495 0.076458572812 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0722578548803 0.0737576698707 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10265454698 0.150856017488 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0931786657514 0.0645574589148 144% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 86.8835125448 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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