Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Currently we are living in a media eccentric world, where getting news is just a finger tip away. But is it important to have knowledge of events happening around us?. Certainly, some people if asked would agree with this statement, while others would say that it is double-edged question due to a number of factors involved. As far as I am concerned, I do agree that having knowledge of events happening in the world is important. However, my viewpint can be best understood after a meticulous discussion of the points relating to the statement.
First of all, it creates a unique personality of ourselves. Having knowledge of current events provides us to create our opinion and present our views among the people. This helps us in various aspects of our lives personal as well as professional. In social and official life you will be regarded as a knowledgeable and intelligent personality. While those who keep their knowledge into a box have very unimpressive personality, no one entertains to talk to them. For instance, all the top level professional have such a cream personality because of their perspective towards thing and life, which they keep on updating with the news and media.
Secondly, it has great significance in terms of our survival in this competitive world. Our lives are full of challanges and competitions, to get success in them, knowledge of our surrounding world plays a crucial role. From my own experience, to clear a competitive exam, I had a schedule of watching news daily for 6 months. My this habit created wonders in passing the exam as I got full marks in the current affairs section. Additionally, with the advancement in technology, it is now far more easy to get news about the events.
Aboveall, some may be of the opinion that getting knowledge of world events is not important as it wastes a lot of their time. However, It improves our skills, which is not a waste of time but investing of our time in right direction. As per an interesting research conducted by CSR institute in India, which shows that 70 percent of the population thinks that it is necessary to watch news daily and media plays an important role in their lives by providing updated information quickly.
In conclusion, taking points i mentined above into consideration, I strongly believe that having knowledge of events happening in the world is verfy important
- TPO - 48 80
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- TPO-11 - Integrated Writing Task 80
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Essay evaluation report
it is double-edged question
it is a double-edged question
As far as I am concerned, I do agree that having knowledge of events happening in the world is important.
As far as I am concerned, having knowledge of events happening in the world is important.
I do agree that having knowledge of events happening in the world is important.
However, my viewpint can be best understood after a meticulous discussion of the points relating to the statement.
description: this sentence can be removed. it is a pattern sentence and unnecessary.
My this habit created wonders in passing the exam
this habit created wonders in passing the exam
is verfy important
is very important
Sentence: However, my viewpint can be best understood after a meticulous discussion of the points relating to the statement.
Error: viewpint Suggestion: viewpoint
Sentence: Our lives are full of challanges and competitions, to get success in them, knowledge of our surrounding world plays a crucial role.
Error: challanges Suggestion: challenges
Sentence: In conclusion, taking points i mentined above into consideration, I strongly believe that having knowledge of events happening in the world is verfy important
Error: verfy Suggestion: very
Error: mentined Suggestion: mentioned
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flaws:
reasons are not very clear and focused. So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 21 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 404 350
No. of Characters: 1927 1500
No. of Different Words: 218 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.483 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.77 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.848 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 129 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 103 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 77 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 58 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.2 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.831 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.55 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.297 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.514 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.105 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 28, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a medium' or simply 'media'?
Suggestion: a medium; media
Currently we are living in a media eccentric world, where getting news is ...
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Line 3, column 647, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ep on updating with the news and media. Secondly, it has great significance in t...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, well, while, for instance, in conclusion, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1985.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 404.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91336633663 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95283128153 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554455445545 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 619.2 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.1334487076 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.25 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.9 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162353915274 0.236089414692 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0539795825623 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0554045975335 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0943516102275 0.150856017488 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0466908365061 0.0645574589148 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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