Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It’s a waste of money for the government to fund space travel or space exploration.
Give specific examples and details to support your answer.
In today’s turbulent economic situation, governments should specify their targeted funding areas cautiously. Throughout history, the space science and astronomy have always been compelling to mankind. Therefore, some people believe that it is one of the government duties to fund space flights and explorations, but I am convinced that it is not an irrational target for governmental funding. Because nowadays environmental issues are the most leading tragedy requiring more financial sources. Furthermore, only a limited population are under the influence of the space science.
First, there are plenty of environmental issues requiring a large amount of governmental fund to be diminished. Today, the most worrying environmental issue is the global warming that has a drastic impact on water supplies, weather pattern, plants, and animal species. To reduce the rate of this inevitable catastrophe, utilization of the renewable energies with a low carbon footprint should be considered necessary. For example, solar and wind energy, as two well known renewable energies, can be employed locally, but the individuals are not willing to pay the high installation costs of the solar panels and wind turbines. Therefore, governments should fund these costs to replace fossil fuel based energies with these low carbon energies. Another significant environmental issue is the garbage problem; every day landfills become larger and larger devouring our planet. To reduce the rate of this accumulation, governments should allocate a large budget not only to recycle plastics, papers, and glasses but also to encourage people to reuse their garbage which is restained by a majority of people. That is, the environmental issues have priority over the space science development.
Secondly, because the space science has a limited impact spectrum, it is preferred that aerospace agencies provide their budget with private funding. Today, private funding with its various subsets is welcomed by a large number of activities. Aerospace agencies could supply themselves with commercial revenue. For instance, the website of the NASA has a commercial space section introducing its various commercial programs and partners. Besides, since space explorations and travels are such attractive subjects for many of people, these agencies could benefit from crowdfunding being a practice of funding a project by receiving a small amount of money from a large number of crowd. Related organizations could use popular social media like Facebook, Instagram, and Twitter to launch a campaign to earn money through crowdfunding. Accordingly, there are lots of other funding sources for these organizations instead of a governmental one.
All in all, it does not seem acceptable to allocate a proportion of the limited public budget to such extravagant space explorations and travels because this attractive industry can easily invite other private funding sources and environmental issues are more significant funding targets for the governments. If we can not rescue the Earth maybe one day we will have to leave our home and to find another planet to live!
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 400, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...tional target for governmental funding. Because nowadays environmental issues are the m...
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Line 7, column 214, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...with its various subsets is welcomed by a large number of activities. Aerospace agencies could su...
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Line 7, column 662, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
... receiving a small amount of money from a large number of crowd. Related organizations could use ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, besides, but, first, furthermore, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2677.0 1977.66487455 135% => OK
No of words: 478.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.60041841004 4.8611393121 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67581127817 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00900316854 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 254.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.531380753138 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 846.0 618.680645161 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.313305268 48.9658058833 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.681818182 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7272727273 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.72727272727 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192465344788 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0551742923069 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0402999814665 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122659337401 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0437066715394 0.0645574589148 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 11.7677419355 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.24 58.1214874552 57% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.2 10.9000537634 139% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.37 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 142.0 86.8835125448 163% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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