Doing different activities or focusing on one thing?
Young people are the most important cast of society, shaping the future with their personal and professional abilities. While some believe that in this crucial age people should focus on one particular activity, I will argue that they should use their presious time to experience different activities, broadening their horizon and imroving their social and personal skills.
To begin with, youths start to learn about the careers and activities they might persue in future at this golden age. The majority of individuals choose their college major or early job in this part of their life which is a door to adulthood. Therefore, theu should endeavor activities from various disciplines to find their true callings. Take the example of a 17-year-old, if she merely spend her time focusing on her science calsses at the school to get into a top-tier university in STEM, she could never explore her possible inherent talent in palying an instrument such as piano. She might be a potential golden medal runner, yet, not trying to run in her youth age, she could never flourish this potential.
To add, having a sucessful life has several aspects. While professional career sucess is a major part of that, it cannot guarantee sucess in life; belonging to a supporting social group is as important. Even regarding to one's career, mere high professional skills would not lead to be sucessful in today's job market. It requires high level of emotional intelligence, communication skills, strong professional networking, and team work skills. Attending in art and sport activities is second to none in developig such skills. Fpr example, when a person is the captain of the shool's socer team, he will learn leadership skills, team work, and effective communication; which all are essential in any career he choose in future.
To conclude, experiencing a wide rage of activities provides youngsters with an golden opprtunity to learn about what their talent and personal fit for their future careers. Also, they can develop their social and personal traints to be a more valuable person for society.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 390, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'spends'.
Suggestion: spends
...example of a 17-year-old, if she merely spend her time focusing on her science calsse...
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Line 5, column 222, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...roup is as important. Even regarding to ones career, mere high professional skills w...
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Line 5, column 708, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'chooses'.
Suggestion: chooses
...hich all are essential in any career he choose in future. To conclude, experiencing...
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Line 5, column 715, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...l are essential in any career he choose in future. To conclude, experiencing a wide ra...
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Line 7, column 78, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
... of activities provides youngsters with an golden opprtunity to learn about what t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, regarding, second, so, therefore, while, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1757.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 341.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15249266862 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75771799807 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.598240469208 0.524837075471 114% => OK
syllable_count: 536.4 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.1742290889 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.133333333 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7333333333 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.86666666667 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0931296118341 0.236089414692 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0295488523246 0.076458572812 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0358794891223 0.0737576698707 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0543433509406 0.150856017488 36% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0234384002301 0.0645574589148 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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