Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Some people hold the view that taking part in a part-time job for students can improve their abilities. However, others may take an opposite viewpoint and believe that students should not have any jobs. From my point of view, the first belief is true. In what follows, I will pinpoint the most outstanding reasons.
The first reason coming to my mind to substantiate my standpoint is concerned about this issue that a part-time job can help students to develop their social skills which lead to improve their self-confidence. For example, when I went to high school, my friend and I decided to be more responsible and hence, we cooperate with the school’s café house. Thanks to that experience, I am a successful person at work since I can behave properly with costumers and my co-workers.
Some people believe that students should concentrate on their study. In fact, they worry about this issue that taking part in a job may lead to a decrease in the focus of students on their program study. Although this point of view is somewhat true, people with this viewpoint should consider that childhood and adolescence is a golden time of life for learning and there are some solutions to tackle this problem. In other words, experts believe that it is so important to reach a balance between study and work for students. It should be noted that more than 70 percent of successful people in their work have gained different experiences during their childhood through different jobs according to a research conducted by one of the most reputable universities of Iran.
From what has been discussed above, we can safely reach this conclusion that students can be more fruitful in the future when they involve in a part-time job along with their study. In fact, taking part in a part-job can improve that skillset that are essential to be more successful in adulthood.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 250, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, however, if, may, so, for example, in fact, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1562.0 1977.66487455 79% => OK
No of words: 318.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91194968553 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68538177286 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 212.727598566 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.509433962264 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 463.5 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.4722648283 48.9658058833 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.571428571 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7142857143 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.14285714286 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198611079799 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.072723086673 0.076458572812 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0604898847088 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135174001969 0.150856017488 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0187833763365 0.0645574589148 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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