Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Our lives have been more affected by TV than cellphones.
Use specific reason and examples to support your answer.
We live in a world called global village nowadays. Nobody doubts that It is mostly called that because of communication instruments such as satellites and the internet. Television and cellphones are used widely by people all across the world these days and it seems it is impossible to live without these two devices. Germane to this fast, a question that is matter of debate, a controversial one, is whether TV has a more significant impact on our lives than cellphone or not. Although TV still has a great deal in forming and shaping ideas and attitudes of the people all around the world, I'm personally on the conviction that this effect of TV is getting reduced by increasing number of cellphones in the world and the importance of cellphones in our lives overshadows that of the TV.
To start out, one compelling reason deserving to be mentioned is that these days probably everyone has a smartphone which can provide people with the access to the internet and social networks which has a great deal in our everyday lives. Official surveys have shown that people, especially younger adults, spend most of their leisure time surfing the internet, talking with their friends through social networks such as Facebook or Whatsapp. Consequently, the youth are mostly influenced by their virtual friends over the internet through their cellphones or tablets. To delineate people are mostly affected by the trends which has become popular through the cellphones and social networks, because these trends are not dictated by governments or big companies. These trends are acceptable by the youth, because every single person can share their interests and spread out their very own ideas with their friends and everyone all over the internet and that's why our life styles are mostly affected by the cellphones.
Another point which is equally important, if not more, is that cellphone are more accessible and people can carry their cellphones everywhere. People usually spend some part of their time outside of their homes and necessarily they have to get away from from their televisions in those times meanwhile they can check out their cellphone everywhere. As a result, people spend more time with their cellphone, specially with their smartphone which can be available everywhere, on the subway, in the park, at the restaurants, wherever the person please and therefore people can be affected more by the cellphone. However it can not be generalized to all context. Senior citizens of the community hardly have a cellphone and it is difficult for them to come along with these new technologies and they spend most of their free times at home watching television. Thus they are more influenced by televisions and its trends instead of cellphone.
To recapitulate, new generations can't be separated from their cellphone and they spend most of their time looking at the screen of their smartphone and they are mostly affected by their mobiles. And as a big fan of smartphones, I personally take comfort in spending most of my time talking with my friends over the cellphones or playing games with my mobile.
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Discourse Markers used:
['consequently', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'so', 'still', 'therefore', 'thus', 'while', 'such as', 'as a result']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.245487364621 0.229887763892 107% => OK
Verbs: 0.138989169675 0.158761421928 88% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0667870036101 0.0866891130778 77% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0595667870036 0.046263068375 129% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0740072202166 0.0685040099705 108% => OK
Prepositions: 0.151624548736 0.118717715034 128% => OK
Participles: 0.0451263537906 0.0351676179071 128% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.73228516496 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0180505415162 0.0309702414327 58% => OK
Particles: 0.00541516245487 0.00188951952338 287% => OK
Determiners: 0.0938628158845 0.0887237588012 106% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0126353790614 0.0209618222197 60% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0126353790614 0.0139019557991 91% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3116.0 2387.08602151 131% => OK
No of words: 515.0 408.028673835 126% => OK
Chars per words: 6.05048543689 5.86048508987 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.763781212 4.48200974243 106% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.363106796117 0.338922669872 107% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.271844660194 0.251872472559 108% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.190291262136 0.174417080927 109% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.139805825243 0.112833075102 124% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73228516496 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.452427184466 0.524397521467 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 52.219153199 59.2087087015 88% => OK
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6684587814 87% => OK
Sentence length: 28.6111111111 20.5533526081 139% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.1061984678 48.84282405 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 173.111111111 120.699889404 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.6111111111 20.5533526081 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.611111111111 0.644075263715 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.54480286738 162% => OK
Readability: 55.7955771305 45.7405998639 122% => OK
Elegance: 1.62251655629 1.45489161554 112% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.246131067956 0.300154397459 82% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.168388458518 0.103427244359 163% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0746819869868 0.0752933317313 99% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.530716558522 0.497263757937 107% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.152911878775 0.151897553556 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10315481774 0.114077575197 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0506504799724 0.0781384742642 65% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.424388694873 0.336927656856 126% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0311346688002 0.067059652881 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175594305903 0.210909579961 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.037192893535 0.0618886996521 60% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8870967742 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.86379928315 52% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.91756272401 102% => OK
Positive topic words: 11.0 8.42114695341 131% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.4623655914 41% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.75985663082 145% => OK
Total topic words: 16.0 13.6433691756 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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