To humans health is most essential which needs to be taken care of. Health has always been given utmost importance where it is often stated that a human in good health is able to achieve most of his goals and ambitions. These computer games are the ones which are pulling the humans away from having a good health and also the natural environment and activities associated with it.
Modern humans tend to spend a majority of their time in from of laptops, computers doing multiple activities, major among them being playing computer games. Though the development of these games has been done a means of entertainment but, the humans especially children have exploited computer games' usage. The kids spend a majority of their time in front of the computer games which giving much heed to food, exercise, outdoor activities. They do not provide much heed to the strain these devices have on the eyes of the users. Hence these devices affect the overall health of the players who go beyond the limited usages of such computer games.
The other bad effect of these games is that these tend to take the users away from the natural world into a virtual world. These users forget how it feels to take a evening stroll, a morning walk, spend some time listening to melodious music, playing an musical instrument and various other activities which contribute in the development of the individual. A human should always respect and adore his natural surroundings.
These computer games tend to eat much of an individuals time where he starts neglecting some of the other important aspects of life.Considering the above i agree that playing games is a waste of time when it is done beyond admissible time, neglecting other aspects of time.
- Commuters complain that increased rush-hour traffic on Blue Highway between the suburbs and the city center has doubled their commuting time. The favored proposal of the motorists' lobby is to widen the highway, adding an additional lane of traffic. But l 38
- Universities should require every student to take a variety of courses outside the student's field of study.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supportin 50
- Universities should require every student to take a variety of courses outside the student's field of study.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supportin 50
- Universities should require every student to take a variety of courses outside the student's field of study.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supportin 50
- Passage:Altruism is a type of behavior in which an animal sacrifices its own interest for that of another animal or group of animals. Altruism is the opposite of selfishness; individuals performing altruistic acts gain nothing for themselves.Examples of a 71
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 531, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
... devices have on the eyes of the users. Hence these devices affect the overall health...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 583, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...devices affect the overall health of the players who go beyond the limited usages...
^^
Line 5, column 164, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...These users forget how it feels to take a evening stroll, a morning walk, spend s...
^
Line 5, column 252, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...e listening to melodious music, playing an musical instrument and various other ac...
^^
Line 7, column 89, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...viduals time where he starts neglecting some of the other important aspects of life.Conside...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 133, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Considering
... of the other important aspects of life.Considering the above i agree that playing games is...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 155, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...t aspects of life.Considering the above i agree that playing games is a waste of ...
^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1443.0 1977.66487455 73% => OK
No of words: 295.0 407.700716846 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89152542373 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54281126164 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 212.727598566 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.518644067797 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 453.6 618.680645161 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.924327649 48.9658058833 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.25 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5833333333 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.0 5.45110844103 37% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192134527658 0.236089414692 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0690328971776 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0589932843217 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116221634329 0.150856017488 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.060313870899 0.0645574589148 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 86.8835125448 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.