Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, it is commonly accepted that the extended family is of the same importance as the close family has. However, there are those who belief that the close family has the great importance at the moment. I, to a great extent, agree with the idea that with the passage of the time the significant of the extended family is decreased day by day. In my opinion, three of the main reasons of this even are being less of communication with the number of extended family, being complex of the style life of people and being replaced of communication with extended family with other thing such as other entertainments and hobbies.
The first and foremost reason that we must pay attention is that with the passage of time thanks to the improvement in technology and some other reasons the number of meeting the extended family has been decreased. therefore, with the decline in meeting each other the importance of extended family has been declined. take me, as an example, when I was a child we, I mean me and my close family, was living in near of my grandfather house. At that time we had several meeting during a month. when we were planning to move out to the other city, this connection became less and less so that I spoke with my grandfather once a year by phone.
The second item which should be took into consideration is that the style and method of human life have changed gradually. To illustrate this phenomenon, I must bring a perfect example to compare the style of the life in the past with in the present. In the pact. most of the people worked as a farmer and as an agriculture and all of them (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) were living in the same place. What is more, the method of life style was similar to each other. while at the being of time, every family has a different job, and they are living in the different place. therefore, it is obvious that these families have different culture and taste. Hence, the importance of other families for each other is decreased.
Finally, the third reason is that people replace some of the ancient activities with the other entertainments and hobbies. In the past, it was a custom that the young people went to the houses of the old members of a big family. this action had a great importance in some society exactly in my society. while this tradition has been ruined. and less families do this model of communication.
In short, all the mentioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that the extended family is less important that it was in the past.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, hence, however, if, second, so, therefore, third, while, i mean, in short, such as, in my opinion, what is more, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 15.1003584229 185% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2083.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 452.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.60840707965 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61088837703 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57123718672 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.424778761062 0.524837075471 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 668.7 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.1718938929 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.5652173913 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.652173913 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.34782608696 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.266089377518 0.236089414692 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0775061647972 0.076458572812 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0652566471318 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173929890808 0.150856017488 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.063740235487 0.0645574589148 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.46 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.06 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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