We accept it or not, extended family have an important rule in our life, although I am agree with this statement that distant relatives is less important now than they were before. I am willing to discuss it by proposing some reasond. First, because of geographical distance that may happen more frequently in the matter of finding a good job or other reasons.
Second, due to their interests, people rather to spend time with ones they have more common.
To support my first reason I should explain that, In the past, it was more common that children set up their own home in a close distance to their parents so they could do their part in family busineses such as farming or animal husbandry. It was common that the family job pass from one generation to another. In the contrary, it became rare todays that childrens continue their parents way in job. people today choose their job based on their interests and pations. The favorable job may be far from the parents home or even hometown. moreover, in the past boys usually chose a wife from thir close area and town, in the contrary, these days, after developing the internet and social medias, platforms is ready to meet and marry forign girls. Both these two reasons lead children to dwell some places far from their parents. As a result base on this distance, extended family have pley a less important role.
Another reason why I advocete the attitude of this oppinion is, nearly all the people prefer to spend their leisure time with the ones that they have more fun with or have more common with. This qualities usually can be fined in the people with the same age. esspecially with increasingly changes that we can see in the technologies ,It is really rare that we can find a parents for example that have a similar gaming interests. So the children are more likely to spend time with the ones that they have this interest in common. This reason is applying to all ages and all sort of families.
From what has discussed above, we can finally drew a conclusion that says, The extended family is less important now than it was before.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, if, may, moreover, really, second, so, well, for example, sort of, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1738.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 373.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.65951742627 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39467950092 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.33095080519 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.525469168901 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 546.3 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.8756611252 48.9658058833 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.5555555556 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7222222222 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.72222222222 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180962578086 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0569052353598 0.076458572812 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0669602208537 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113444091497 0.150856017488 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0604907637706 0.0645574589148 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.