The extension of modern technologies has provided a variety of celebrities in our society. In my opinion, young persons are more prone to follow famous individuals' behavior. I feel this way for two main reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, older adults are less familiar with famous people. Since most of the old individuals do not accustom to modern technologies such as Instagram, Twitter, et, they know less than youth about celebrities. My example demonstrates this concept. In our house, my sister is one of the most loyal fans of Mohamady, who is a famous singer in our country. She always checks his concerts and messages on Instagram.
On the other hand, my mother even doesn't know how exactly work with her cellphone, so she doesn't pursue these channels. As a result, she doesn't know any celebrity. This story shows how using modern technologies make people familiar with famous society.
Secondly, old persons are not willing to follow celebrities. When people get old, their responsibilities increase either. So, they 'don't have time and energy to entertain themselves with 'celebrities' manners. They consider these practices boring and not suitable for them. The next story is compelling evidence of this matter. Last year, I went to my grandfather's house, and then I asked him about his view on one of the celebrities' customs to wear a red hat, which was a very popular custom for a while in our city. My grandfather, however, got angry with me. He mentioned that these behaviors are ridiculous, and I should focus on my future. When I answered why he became such fierce, he told me that these customs are wasting youth time and concentration. He thought young people should care about some valuables ideas, not just ones that are coming from some influential group of people. This shows that old men and women don't care about 'celebrities' opinions because they have a lot of valuable experiences.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that young people are more enthisuastic to mimic celebrities' behaviors because they spend more their time in cyberspace than older people. Also because aged individuals are experienced persons and are less passionate about supporting celebrities' manners.
- TPO 52 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 76
- TPO 52 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 3
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- TOEFL T P O 47 - Integrated Writing Task 3
- TOEFL T P O 44 - Integrated Writing Task 3
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 153, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
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Suggestion: doesn't
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Suggestion: doesn't
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Suggestion: doesn't
...pursue these channels. As a result, she doesnt know any celebrity. This story shows ho...
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Suggestion: don't
...ponsibilities increase either. So, they dont have time and energy to entertain thems...
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Suggestion: don't
...ople. This shows that old men and women dont care about celebrities opinions because...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...r time in cyberspace than older people. Also because aged individuals are experience...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, second, secondly, so, then, while, i feel, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1866.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 368.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07065217391 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80872068067 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.548913043478 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 581.4 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.7347979316 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.75 100.406767564 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.3333333333 20.6045352989 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.91666666667 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205973179824 0.236089414692 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0546440112074 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0527031239255 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115760659866 0.150856017488 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0364600987775 0.0645574589148 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.53 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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