Do you agree or disagree? It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ jobs.
In the modern society, career is crucial issue for young people. Job seekers tend to find situation with less risks. Father and mother have worth experience than children can use. Whether children would rather continue parents' work or start new career depends on their personality. According what I generally believe, choosing keep on caregivers' job is best selection. The following paragraphs by containing the main reasons, will substantiate my viewpoint.
The main reasons why I believe that it is very beneficial, while we do job similar to our parents. To elaborate on my point, since parents do the jobs for long time, guardians not only have valuable experience but also have extensive broad horizon. A significant example that strikes on my mind is about my brother. When my brother wanted to choose major for university, my father said that choose civil engineering which related my fathers' work. After several years, my brother use fathers' experiment; therefore, he can earn remarkable success. Also, my father learns special and favorable tips and tricks to the son and it causes my brother is become prominence person in the civil engineering.
Besides, another influential drive behind this opt from duty as the same as caregivers is percent of fail is reduced. To elucidate my claim, if offspring accurate use parents' advice, they would decline possibility of fail in the career. A quite clear example would be company of my uncle. At first, when he was working as worker behind her father, he decided start her own jobs. Hence, my grandfather helped him to achieved her goal and avoided to failed her son. And after many years, my uncle become far known person to the work. Nonetheless, unless my uncle had chosen job which not related patents' work, he would fail or he not success as he is.
To conclude, I generally hold the opinion that parents are the best adviser for doing or selecting career, therefore it is beneficial for children if elect jobs as the same as their father and mother. Due to guardians have worthwhile knowledge; thus, they can aid children and reduce possibility of frailer.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 106, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun risks is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...Job seekers tend to find situation with less risks. Father and mother have worth exp...
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Line 1, column 351, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'is the best'.
Suggestion: is the best
...elieve, choosing keep on caregivers job is best selection. The following paragraphs by...
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Line 3, column 350, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to major'
Suggestion: to major
...other. When my brother wanted to choose major for university, my father said that cho...
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Line 3, column 698, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...inence person in the civil engineering. Besides, another influential drive behin...
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Line 5, column 573, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to job'
Suggestion: to job
...Nonetheless, unless my uncle had chosen job which not related patents work, he woul...
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Line 7, column 309, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...dren and reduce possibility of frailer.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, hence, if, nonetheless, so, therefore, thus, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 52.1666666667 61% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1773.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 354.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00847457627 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33761313653 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64182899326 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.601694915254 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 549.9 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.0217873099 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.4285714286 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8571428571 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.66666666667 5.45110844103 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202855361578 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0599476596157 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.067746196332 0.0737576698707 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14680091107 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0654735085535 0.0645574589148 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.48 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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